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05-21-2009, 08:24 PM
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sleepe
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: boston
Posts: 1,140
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Double X's dump
Well a lot of my 'songs' I play with my band is just me using a melody from another song, changing lyrics to something I like, and then changing the melody so it doesn't seem like I stole it.
So here goes nothing I guess...most of it is just dreary chamber pop that my band makes into lazy distorted stuff When_they jump, in the river There_is no one coming back for you And_the sun, shining over the clouds But_when the rain falls down your breath will end And_you saw Yourself_in the mirror The_sun glistened in your eyes And_the blood moves through the veins But_the-sun shines on And_the rain keeps falling down And_these new graves mesh In_this fresh fertile ground And_then you saw Yourself_in the mirror And_you Gasp_and scurry away And_the sun shines on, But_rain keeps falling down. Do_you cry? Or_is it, just the dirt in your eyes? But_the-sun shines on And_the rain keeps falling down And_these new graves mesh In_this fresh fertile ground And_then he fell Into_the river And_the sun's fading from his eyes And_you know he’s going to die But_the-sun shines on And_the rain keeps falling down And_these new graves mesh In_this fresh fertile ground But_the sun shines on And_the rain keeps falling down And_these new graves mesh In_this fresh fertile ground And_then you saw Yourself_the mirror And_there’s rain cloud over your head And_you know you’ll soon be dead But_the sun shines on And_the rain Will keep falling Down |
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05-21-2009, 08:25 PM
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sleepe
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: boston
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It's_kinda cold, in here
It's_kinda dreary, nothing ever happens It's_kinda dull, in here It's_kinda eerie, something's gonna happen Slipping_through the empty... Wading_through the charade... Breaking_down all the useless... Wanting_the old... It's_kinda cold, in here It's_kinda dreary, nothing ever happens It's_kinda dull, in here It's_kinda eerie, something's gonna happen Hiding_all the angry... Wishing_for the old... Dying_to reach forgotten... Knowing_that the... |
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05-21-2009, 08:25 PM
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sleepe
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: boston
Posts: 1,140
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Hey_mister, I'm only seventeen
Smells_kinda good but I ain't too keen You_know where all the kids can blow- Bubbles_and you told them but they wouldn't go He's_a dirty, dirty man He'll_take, whoever he can Susie,_Jessica, Ann He's_a dirty, dirty man Loves_the air of Saturday night Feeling_safe being out of sight You_know where all the kids can blow- Bubbles_and you got something to show He's_a dirty, dirty man He'll_take, whoever he can Susie,_Jessica, Ann He's_a dirty, dirty man |
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05-21-2009, 08:26 PM
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sleepe
Join Date: Jun 2008
Location: boston
Posts: 1,140
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It_can't be wrong
The_way you look The_way you move I_know it can't be wrong I_saw you laying down In_the grass My_courage sapped Now_the chance has passed It_can't be wrong The_way you look The_way you move I_know it can't be wrong |
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05-22-2009, 10:16 PM
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young gun funyun
Join Date: May 2009
Location: Southern US
Posts: 166
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Your last two songs are better than your first. Reason being is that your first two songs are dodgy and clichéd. The last two express emotion, flow, and an interesting story. I would certainly like to read some more of your stuff.
 btw, I have some relatives in eastern Massachusetts--Topsfield to be exact. |
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05-23-2009, 08:51 AM
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young gun funyun
Join Date: May 2009
Location: Southern US
Posts: 166
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Quote:
peace, -nick |
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- and the first two songs I ripped off of crappy songs, so it would make sense that they suck.
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