An unknown poem what cha think?

Unknown 92891 · 11-26-2010, 11:48 PM

Entitled "Windows"

Days pass me by, as i look out the window
side seat beside me apparently taken for
Although i see no one i wait in the silence
believing with faith that they will return

They promise me reason's and they promise me smiles
but show no progress toward them
So instead i lay broken crying on the floor
My heart in my chest still taken for

All together im lost and
All together confused
wishing the days would return
in which i was with you
But nights pass me by as i lay in the silence
wondering where i should go next

laying down broken bricks
to go along with a broken path
A path by my bedside that no soul see's
everyday i dream looking out the window
praying a redeemer will come to be seen

Everything and nothing compare to no one
perfect and innocence go hand in hand
Happy and broken wither in texture
both caused by one person's hand

But we all believe what we want to
no one can cause us to fall apart
We determine our faith when looking in the mirror
Cause no one can touch what lies in the glass

day upon day we walk like were dieing
but cant we see that were living within
thats why i turn back to that window
allowing now for life to begin

i was too lazy to punctuate correctly, but you may just pretend i left it open for you to make the pauses and rhythm in your own mind..hmm tricky tricky enjoy tell me what you think, and if you enjoy i have more =]

I almost forgot, thanks for reading.

teknoaxe · 11-28-2010, 05:20 PM

Very good as a poem...not sure how it would play out as a song. I think it would not be for rock, but rather kind a slow piano piece.

Unknown 92891 · 11-28-2010, 10:37 PM

Thank you, and i don't intend it for more than a poem, i agree i don't believe that it would play out well as a song.

11-26-2010, 11:48 PM	#1 (permalink)
Unknown 92891 Groupie Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 3	An unknown poem what cha think? Entitled "Windows" Days pass me by, as i look out the window side seat beside me apparently taken for Although i see no one i wait in the silence believing with faith that they will return They promise me reason's and they promise me smiles but show no progress toward them So instead i lay broken crying on the floor My heart in my chest still taken for All together im lost and All together confused wishing the days would return in which i was with you But nights pass me by as i lay in the silence wondering where i should go next laying down broken bricks to go along with a broken path A path by my bedside that no soul see's everyday i dream looking out the window praying a redeemer will come to be seen Everything and nothing compare to no one perfect and innocence go hand in hand Happy and broken wither in texture both caused by one person's hand But we all believe what we want to no one can cause us to fall apart We determine our faith when looking in the mirror Cause no one can touch what lies in the glass day upon day we walk like were dieing but cant we see that were living within thats why i turn back to that window allowing now for life to begin i was too lazy to punctuate correctly, but you may just pretend i left it open for you to make the pauses and rhythm in your own mind..hmm tricky tricky enjoy tell me what you think, and if you enjoy i have more =] I almost forgot, thanks for reading.

11-28-2010, 05:20 PM	#2 (permalink)
teknoaxe Groupie Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 24	Very good as a poem...not sure how it would play out as a song. I think it would not be for rock, but rather kind a slow piano piece.

11-28-2010, 10:37 PM	#3 (permalink)
Unknown 92891 Groupie Join Date: Nov 2010 Posts: 3	Thank you, and i don't intend it for more than a poem, i agree i don't believe that it would play out well as a song.