Dark Circle

Do you remember my name
When I am silent?
Do you sometimes wake up at night
And wonder why?

How many reasons is there?
How many reasons to stop?
Not many to go on
Take chance and don't look back!
There is no reason to stay,
Why don't you take me with you
And leave it all behind?
Just let it stay unknown.

Do you remember the road
Leading you somewhere?
Do you sometimes try to move on
Where you left off?

How many reasons is there?
How many reasons to stop?
Not many to go on
Take chance and don't look back!
There is no reason to stay,
Why don't you take me with you
And leave it all behind?
Just let it stay unknown.

What it means to you
To lead you somewhere unknown?
If you chose to stay
You'll find your pain

How many reasons is there?
How many reasons to stop?
Not many to go on
Take chance and don't look back!
There is no reason to stay,
Why don't you take me with you
And leave it all behind?
Just let it stay unknown.

You won't remember my name
You won't remember at all
But if you chose to go
There might be chance for you
But if you chose to wake up
and don't keep dreaming your dream
We will be same as all
Again you'll be too late

Dark Circle

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sleepy jack

I know i've heard that second question in a song before, or something very similar to it. The first isn't that good either.

These sound like bad hawthorne heights lyrics, and they're already pretty bad. The vocabulary just isn't interesting, and the subject is terrible.

These questions are just so urgh, because they're so overdone.

Great, another teen saying life is all pain!

And i'm glad its over, this was just bad. Songs about suicide typically aren't that great, I mean you have some like Adam's Song that while not fantastic lyrics at least aren't cliche about it. Encouraging it, well I can't think of anyway to make that good. This is pretty awful, and its not just the subject the vocabulary and wording is bad to read.

I suggest you try and break out of the depressed teen box, and read some more books to expand your vocabulary as well as listen to Kayo Dot and Circle Takes The Square, or at least read the lyric or some poetry, Oscar Wilde or Robert Frost. Plus keep writing, just don't write about the same tired subjects that are all over the radio.

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either/or

i agree with crowquill, this sucked. It's just really boring and cliche. Don't pain the world with this.

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Painstaking devotion and love
Surrendered to self preservation
From others who care for themselves
A blindness that touches perfection
But hurts just like anything else

Isolation, isolation, isolation

Dark Circle

You got it all wrong! The song is not suicidal, it's quite positive, actually. I tried to talk about taking the last chance but from a different angle. I will explain:

Do you remember my name
When I am silent?

This part is about people these days in general. Real friendships do not exist and all our life we spend with "temporary friends", who come and go every now and then.

Do you sometimes wake up at night
And wonder why?

This part is about apreciation of ones work. We try so hard just to be unapreciated and missunderstood.

How many reasons is there?
How many reasons to stop?
Not many to go on
Take chance and don't look back!
There is no reason to stay,
Why don't you take me with you
And leave it all behind?
Just let it stay unknown.

Now, this is the point of the song. People might think that it is about suicide, but if you look at it carefully you'll realise that it's not. It is about taking chance and forgetting all the bad things we leave behind, but without changing who we really are because not all the things we leave behind are bad. That is what "why don't you take me with you" part says. We might think that there is no point in taking chances but that is when we are wrong. I tried to say that we must go on no matter how little reasons we have.

Do you remember the road
Leading you somewhere?
Do you sometimes try to move on
Where you left off?

It's not always easy to keep moving and we often give up. This part of the song is a reminder to keep doing what we have forgotten. Every road leads somewhere and it is always better to be mobile.

What it means to you
To lead you somewhere unknown?
If you chose to stay
You'll find your pain

There is always a period when we question how much we want to succeed. As I said before moving is always better than staying still and if you lived in Serbia you would understand the "You'll find your pain" part.

You won't remember my name
You won't remember at all
But if you chose to go
There might be chance for you
But if you chose to wake up
and don't keep dreaming your dream
We will be same as all
Again you'll be too late

This part is the sad truth about succeeding. Trying to forget our false friendships we isolate ourselves even from our real friends and in time we forget them. Our friends are aware of that but we know that they are real friensbecause they encourage us to move on anyway. They know what awaits if we fail and they make us take our chance before we're too late.

As for the vocabulary, I read a lot and I write pretty good. Only I had to fit the lyrics into the melody and it sounds pretty much better when you hear it

Alo

^ Yeah, it may sound better, but the lyrics are nothing special. It's cliche, and all been said (sung) before.

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I rocked my shoelaces untied

Loser

There are ways to make a certain topic less cliche I do it and it seems to be working out, all you need to do is put it in ways no one has ever heard it before or think of the complete opposite of what something does. We have thousands of words which means when writing you can play with the words and play with the way you put it. That's the glory of language you can manipulate any word or words to say what you want them to say.

Dark Circle

You try to fit it in a song! It is not that easy because I make the melody first and then I write the lyrics.

Loser

Try to do the reverse because if you do the melody first your setting yourself up for a cliche song. Try writing the lyrics first go to the band give them what you got and see what happens. Try new stuff maybe it'll work.

Dark Circle

You don't understand! I am the band, I do everyting but singing (that is the job of the girl behind me). It is much easier to write lyrics for a melody than to make a melody for lyrics