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Old 01-18-2018, 08:15 AM   #3461 (permalink)
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Alright few critques

1) Get some real instruments for god's sake the midi sounds like absolute **** on this track and this coming from someone who loves sequencer and midi music
Yeah, it's no doubt a thing that I could stand to improve. I have a personal fondness for the Adlib sound of old PC games and the samples I tend to use these days are basically exported adlib sounds from a music program I have for DOS. I personally think it sounds better than MIDI, but it's very much a thing that I've gotten negative feedback on more than once. I have a lot of older stuff that uses very different kinds of samples.

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2) the structure of the song really goes nowhere, and that repetition of the chord and drum hits on the 4, 1!!! of every measure is grating to say the least
I took the idea of the structure from Dir En grey. That band often plays the verse and chorus only once, then throws in some variation and other verse. The second chorus usually doesn't come until the end, with a lot of delays before then. Not that this track follows that to a tee, but it's the basic idea.

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4) i cannot for the life of me pin down what tone you're going for, at first it straight up sounds like the intro to a terrible sitcom, but as the track goes on it sounds like you're going for some epic 90's post rock feeling, however the chords just do not align with that at all.
I don't ever write music with any particular style or genre in mind. It's just sort of its own thing, whatever that may be.

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i strongly disagree with Machine

for me it sounds like a SNES platformer soundtrack influenced tune and i can see it going perfectly in the background of some Castlevania-esque 80s throwback game.

it's kind of a niche sound so maybe if you didn't grow up on it it wouldn't mean much but it's pretty cool imo for what it's worth. i do agree that it's a little rough around the edges and could be fleshed out a little more, but irregardless i like the sound you're going for. though i believe i've told you this already in regards to past music you've posted.
It's a niche sound for sure. There's no doubt that it's basically video game inspired music, but more early 90's DOS games than SNES. I think that if one played through all the games I played in the 90's, this sound would make more sense
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In response to both of you, I'm not dismissing any criticism - I'm just very unsure of to what degree my music just sucks and to what degree it's maybe just very niche. I've had a fair share of positive reactions over the years, but also quite the opposite.
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Old 01-18-2018, 08:16 AM   #3462 (permalink)
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Old 01-18-2018, 08:29 AM   #3466 (permalink)
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Yeah, it's no doubt a thing that I could stand to improve. I have a personal fondness for the Adlib sound of old PC games and the samples I tend to use these days are basically exported adlib sounds from a music program I have for DOS. I personally think it sounds better than MIDI, but it's very much a thing that I've gotten negative feedback on more than once. I have a lot of older stuff that uses very different kinds of samples.



I took the idea of the structure from Dir En grey. That band often plays the verse and chorus only once, then throws in some variation and other verse. The second chorus usually doesn't come until the end, with a lot of delays before then. Not that this track follows that to a tee, but it's the basic idea.



I don't ever write music with any particular style or genre in mind. It's just sort of its own thing, whatever that may be.



It's a niche sound for sure. There's no doubt that it's basically video game inspired music, but more early 90's DOS games than SNES. I think that if one played through all the games I played in the 90's, this sound would make more sense
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i gotchu it's just not fleshed out enough for my taste
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i gotchu it's just not fleshed out enough for my taste
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