My ****

Sneer · 05-30-2005, 08:43 AM

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Originally Posted by .angie.

that sucks. and you're an idiot. leave the forums NOW.

i love the fact YOUR calling HIM an idiot. bit of respect for others would be nice. we cant all be as good as you.

TheBig3 · 06-01-2005, 10:22 PM

Yeah I agree that couplets are a bad rhyme scheme to use. Only a few people ever have done them to the degree that they are tolerable. And its mostly victorian poetry. My suggestion is, and I've had to learn this myself, is you need to teach yourself to be honest. I find alot of the time when I write, that I want to make things more coloful or flowery. Can all of that, write what you think and feel.

Above all else, personal stuff like this, use free verse. Lines don't have to rhyme if they stay in melody (and therefore have roughly the same syllable count). Rhyme schemes like Abab are cool once in awhile but if you listen to the great song writers. They write plainly, plain spoken. Don't listen to angie, "personal" mean "terrible", keep writing dude.

phoenixflames · 06-02-2005, 06:56 AM

^ Good post.

Urban Hat€monger ? · 06-02-2005, 07:06 AM

I think you should play more on the Hitler theme

Y`know you blitzkrieged my heart & now I feel like i`m in Poland in 1939

Or something

Fenixpunk · 06-02-2005, 08:12 AM

keep writing, dont let anyone else discourage you. Writing the typical anti-everything punk rock song is as easy as it comes. Lyrics like this with a more personal message are a bit harder for most people and to perform a personal song live infront of a crowd takes some guts. It took me almost 6 years of playing before i even attempted to write something of this nature. Even though the pattern is too repetitive, with some decent breaks in it and a good sludgy rythem It may not sound as terrible as people think.

06-02-2005, 08:13 AM

i think what you hafta do is kinda what big3 said just write from the heart and dont think too hard bout it... just let it flow...

06-01-2005, 10:22 PM	#12 (permalink)
TheBig3 killedmyraindog Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Boston, Massachusetts Posts: 11,172	Yeah I agree that couplets are a bad rhyme scheme to use. Only a few people ever have done them to the degree that they are tolerable. And its mostly victorian poetry. My suggestion is, and I've had to learn this myself, is you need to teach yourself to be honest. I find alot of the time when I write, that I want to make things more coloful or flowery. Can all of that, write what you think and feel. Above all else, personal stuff like this, use free verse. Lines don't have to rhyme if they stay in melody (and therefore have roughly the same syllable count). Rhyme schemes like Abab are cool once in awhile but if you listen to the great song writers. They write plainly, plain spoken. Don't listen to angie, "personal" mean "terrible", keep writing dude. __________________ I've moved to a new address

06-02-2005, 06:56 AM	#13 (permalink)
phoenixflames Something That You're Not Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Cold And All Alone Posts: 475	^ Good post. __________________ ----------- I'm the lead singer and bass player for the band The Ascent (And Decline) Of Terrion. Yay for me... We're from Ohio. Yay for us... www.theascentofterrion.com Be our friend on MySpace

06-02-2005, 07:06 AM	#14 (permalink)
Urban Hat€monger ? The Sexual Intellectual Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Somewhere cooler than you Posts: 18,605	I think you should play more on the Hitler theme Y`know you blitzkrieged my heart & now I feel like i`m in Poland in 1939 Or something __________________ Urb's RYM Stuff Most people sell their soul to the devil, but the devil sells his soul to Nick Cave.

06-02-2005, 08:12 AM	#15 (permalink)
Fenixpunk The Erroneous Hoodlum Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: West Side Phoenix Posts: 2,057	keep writing, dont let anyone else discourage you. Writing the typical anti-everything punk rock song is as easy as it comes. Lyrics like this with a more personal message are a bit harder for most people and to perform a personal song live infront of a crowd takes some guts. It took me almost 6 years of playing before i even attempted to write something of this nature. Even though the pattern is too repetitive, with some decent breaks in it and a good sludgy rythem It may not sound as terrible as people think. __________________ This message has been approved by Shawn Erroneous - The Declaimed

06-02-2005, 08:13 AM	#16 (permalink)
pastor of muppets Guest Posts: n/a	i think what you hafta do is kinda what big3 said just write from the heart and dont think too hard bout it... just let it flow...