Kennymercury

What do you guys think about this thread?

We all live in our own reality
To be conscience is an illusion we've made ourselves
to believe
And that's what controls every single one of our realities
Our conscious mind's delusion that we choose to perceive
If we can be baffled by magic tricks while in consciousness
Then our perception itself is flawed

How is our mind still governor of our laws?

Our body as it's own state of being needs to secede
Become free
to reach ultimate reality
And the reality to us is:
The truth as we do not know it
The time and space that we grow with
unbeknownst to us is a miraculous and just experience
Manifested by gamble
Let's stop believing this entire life scandal that our mind's dodge us with
And let's start living, really living this fortunate unknown experience

Screw "seeing is believing",
Belief only weakens,
Don't just try to believe what you see,

search for the answers beneath it

Key

Seriously? You want some critique? Here it goes:

The reason I don't like what you've been writing is due to the fact that it sounds like you pulled multiple parts out of a My Chemical Romance song and put them together and called it your own. I don't know what your life is like, but you sound like a young teenager finally realizing what it's like to feel, and your trying to let your poetry reflect it. It sounds like a cliche "i hate my life" poem, and there's nothing interesting about it.

Paul Smeenus

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ladyislingering

sounds like you need to brush your dyed-black fringe out of your eyes so you can see what you're writing.

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Kennymercury

this poem is actually about the human conscious and psychology, ive read how scientists are now saying how our minds can play tricks on us so what we percieve as reality isnt always real cuz our conscious tends to alter that perception so im saying in the poem why just tap into our conscious y not go beyond that and really see reality for wat it really is..... So I hope u understand the poem a lil better lol

Key

So...what's the point?

Kennymercury

Oh the point I was making was more for self-reflection, many people ask why does this person to be this way, or why cant I be what I wanna be in life, these questions all have to do with ur sub-conscious right? Sigmund freud theorized that ppl can only see things and underztand things at a conscious level, but most if the time its at our subconscious level that we figure out who we are as people, so why not try to dig deeper and understand ourzelves better n live a more free Nd unknown reality right? Instead of living the illusion that we do know whats going even tho we're alk wrong cuz we're afraid to take our understanding to the next level

butthead aka 216

i think pretty much all poetry is bullsheeet to be honest but i came here cause i thought it was an allen iverson thread and now i realize its not and im a little cranky so im just gonna leave and tell ya to keep strivin to reach your dreams