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Old 06-26-2005, 01:55 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default the product of too much MCR

my name is tristan; and i am alive.
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Old 06-26-2005, 03:10 PM   #2 (permalink)
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I like how the poison you choose wasn't directly a poison. If you had said arsenic I'd have said it was cheezy. I'd still move it further away, making them independant. Saying he's apoison addict lets us know shes poisonous, so makes he lies something else.

Your use of the word "sugar" makes me think of Fallout Boy and this triggers two reactions in me.

1.) I hate fallout boy, that song is terrible and so I have a prejudice against it.
2.) and the word sugar doesn't seem to fit with the culture of emo, it seems forced. When I think of someone using the word sugar, i don't picture emo kids. This is the reason their probably doing it, just to be diffrent, but the point is that it seems forced. a man who uses the words for "suger" to describe women does not "hate himself"

also, that line "hate myself to ****ing much". I'd loose it. Self hatred is trite and cliche after nu-mteal forced it down our throat. Go somewhere else with that ending, make another barrier between you and her, self-hatred is just boring. and then, if you do change it, go on to elaborate on the problem.
...This guy Rutledge killed a man with a motorboat.
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Old 06-28-2005, 12:27 PM   #3 (permalink)
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ss? what the hell is that?
How'd I end up here to begin with? I don't know.
Why do I start what I can't finish?
Oh please, don't barrage me with questions to all those ugly answers.
My ego's like my stomach- it keeps shitting what I feed it.
But maybe I don't want to finish anything anymore..
maybe I can wait in bed 'til she comes home. and whispers....

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Remember kids: It's only real metal if the vocalist sounds like he's vomiting up a fetus. \m/
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Old 07-02-2005, 08:27 AM   #4 (permalink)
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he musta deleted it.
One note timeless, came out of nowhere...
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