Song Lyrics (For a Tune)

Plainview · 12-07-2014, 05:54 AM

I’m going to start a cold war, from the confines of my bedroom.
Let them all just lay down, on the ground one by one.
Staring at the pavements, solid but not moving.
Slowing, hardly breathing, quiet as the night sky.

And the turn the world upon its head.
Turn the world upon its head.
What was that you nearly said?
What was that you nearly said?

They’re gonna have to stop me, I feel my chest expanding.
Faster than the universe, I’m about to implode.
Look at all their faces, frightened as children.
Powerless and frantic, powerless and frantic.

And the turn the world upon its head.
Turn the world upon its head.
What was that you nearly said?
What was that you nearly said?

Or maybe not.
Or maybe not.
Or maybe not.

I have a pretty strong idea of how this would sound in my head, a rocky - electronic vibe, the first verse building up slowly with acoustic and drums before exploding into the chorus with an electric guitar, which carries on into the second verse + chorus, before a short break where everything slows down, seguing into the simple acoustic ending.

Conceptually, this is a narrator imaging himself bringing down society from his bedroom, getting caught up in his fantasy before eventually brushing it off.

Style wise, think Paranoid Android, or something along those lines (with less 90s-ness). Let me know what you think!

WritingWithRhythm · 12-07-2014, 02:51 PM

I like this. I'm not sure how I feel about all of the repeating, but that could turn out great with music. Your idea for how the song would turn out makes it sound like it could be enjoyable. Good job!

Plainview · 12-08-2014, 01:37 PM

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Originally Posted by WritingWithRhythm

I like this. I'm not sure how I feel about all of the repeating, but that could turn out great with music. Your idea for how the song would turn out makes it sound like it could be enjoyable. Good job!

Thanks! I think the repetition of lyrics could work, but it's always hard to strike a balance between conciseness and repetition (same with descriptiveness and wordiness). I'll keep your point in mind though. Cheers.

Mr.Cramming · 12-10-2014, 07:46 AM

I kinda have an image of what I could do with this song, though the chords are pretty difficult and uncommon, so not really commercial.

12-07-2014, 05:54 AM	#1 (permalink)
Plainview ⁣ Join Date: Dec 2014 Posts: 721	Song Lyrics (For a Tune) I’m going to start a cold war, from the confines of my bedroom. Let them all just lay down, on the ground one by one. Staring at the pavements, solid but not moving. Slowing, hardly breathing, quiet as the night sky. And the turn the world upon its head. Turn the world upon its head. What was that you nearly said? What was that you nearly said? They’re gonna have to stop me, I feel my chest expanding. Faster than the universe, I’m about to implode. Look at all their faces, frightened as children. Powerless and frantic, powerless and frantic. And the turn the world upon its head. Turn the world upon its head. What was that you nearly said? What was that you nearly said? Or maybe not. Or maybe not. Or maybe not. I have a pretty strong idea of how this would sound in my head, a rocky - electronic vibe, the first verse building up slowly with acoustic and drums before exploding into the chorus with an electric guitar, which carries on into the second verse + chorus, before a short break where everything slows down, seguing into the simple acoustic ending. Conceptually, this is a narrator imaging himself bringing down society from his bedroom, getting caught up in his fantasy before eventually brushing it off. Style wise, think Paranoid Android, or something along those lines (with less 90s-ness). Let me know what you think! Last edited by Plainview; 12-10-2014 at 08:38 AM.

12-07-2014, 02:51 PM	#2 (permalink)
WritingWithRhythm Groupie Join Date: Dec 2014 Posts: 3	I like this. I'm not sure how I feel about all of the repeating, but that could turn out great with music. Your idea for how the song would turn out makes it sound like it could be enjoyable. Good job!

12-10-2014, 07:46 AM	#4 (permalink)
Mr.Cramming Groupie Join Date: Dec 2014 Posts: 18	I kinda have an image of what I could do with this song, though the chords are pretty difficult and uncommon, so not really commercial.