Ok to say: Save from a war; Burn from inside?

Ilpoxi · 11-24-2018, 08:33 AM

I'd like to have a response from the native English speakers.

I have lines:

1. How to save the nation from a war.

And:

2. African flames are burning from inside.

Is the grammar ok?

3. I have a verse:

Moving planets form a seesaw
Where the gravity has been caught
Although Jupiter has lost the force

Is the grammar ok?

Lisnaholic · 11-24-2018, 04:42 PM

Yes, your grammar looks fine to me, Ilpoxi, and these days, lyrics don't have to be grammatically correct anyway.

As a native English speaker, the way you have used "the" in #3 is perhaps a little strange: it'd be more normal to say "Where gravity has been caught."

Also, in normal usage, #1 would typically be part of a longer idea, for example:
"I don't know how to save the nation from a war" or "How to save the nation from a war is a problem for politicians today."

"Moving planets form a seesaw" is a great line, btw.

Ilpoxi · 11-25-2018, 02:07 AM

Ok, Lisnaholic, thanks for the comments. Then I have to change the line to
"Where THEIR gravity has been caught"
because I cannot remove the note.

11-24-2018, 08:33 AM	#1 (permalink)
Ilpoxi Groupie Join Date: Oct 2018 Location: Oulu Posts: 11	Ok to say: Save from a war; Burn from inside? I'd like to have a response from the native English speakers. I have lines: 1. How to save the nation from a war. And: 2. African flames are burning from inside. Is the grammar ok? 3. I have a verse: Moving planets form a seesaw Where the gravity has been caught Although Jupiter has lost the force Is the grammar ok?

11-24-2018, 04:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
Lisnaholic ...here to hear... Join Date: Nov 2010 Location: He lives on Love Street Posts: 4,444	Yes, your grammar looks fine to me, Ilpoxi, and these days, lyrics don't have to be grammatically correct anyway. As a native English speaker, the way you have used "the" in #3 is perhaps a little strange: it'd be more normal to say "Where gravity has been caught." Also, in normal usage, #1 would typically be part of a longer idea, for example: "I don't know how to save the nation from a war" or "How to save the nation from a war is a problem for politicians today." "Moving planets form a seesaw" is a great line, btw. __________________ "Am I enjoying this moment? I know of it and perhaps that is enough." - Sybille Bedford, 1953

11-25-2018, 02:07 AM	#3 (permalink)
Ilpoxi Groupie Join Date: Oct 2018 Location: Oulu Posts: 11	Ok, Lisnaholic, thanks for the comments. Then I have to change the line to "Where THEIR gravity has been caught" because I cannot remove the note.