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11-29-2005, 08:02 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Nov 2005
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just say anything about this
i was going to post one of my good songs, but I wouldn't want to do that, so I left you with this **** one instead.
people say you're ugly/ but there's something about you/ definetly/ people say I'm crazy/ But there's something about you/ that only I can see/ A troubled past/ that not many could deal with/ I'll promise I'll last/ I'll be the guy you spend your life with/ Bullied by the others/ But I'll come to your rescue/ I'm here to protect you/ I'll heal the cuts on your wrists/ Because I can't live without you/ understand you'll be missed/ A troubled past/ that not many could deal with/ I'll promise I'll last/ I'll be the guy you spend your life with/ |
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11-29-2005, 08:33 AM
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They call me Tundra Boy
Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: In your linen cupboard.
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If you want some kind of good criticism, post up a song that you can honestly say is your best effort. Don't make excuses! |
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11-29-2005, 08:35 AM
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Account Disabled
Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: milkyway galaxy
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11-29-2005, 08:49 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 18
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i am totally open to criticism. i have got to say though that i was kind of looking for more constructive criticism. I am still early on the whole music writing thing (as you can probably tell lol) i really don't feel like posting my best efforts because if they get bad criticism then i am doomed for eternity. just saying that my song is utter bollocks, even though that maybe the case, is not very helpful. it really is just a waste of a post. i had a feeling that this song would get a bad rep (and i was right) but considering that i have taken the time to get your opinion you should at least give me something that is a valid point of view.
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11-29-2005, 08:19 PM
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Join Date: Nov 2004
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11-30-2005, 12:47 AM
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Groupie
Join Date: Nov 2005
Posts: 18
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this song isn't a true story I kind of draw on things that other people have experienced or I know are going on. I know the fact that I never put a good one in sounds suspicious but I am reworking the lyrics of them at the moment and also if I put them on here and they get totally ripped apart then I'll kind of be like this
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12-01-2005, 08:18 AM
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Music Addict
Join Date: Sep 2005
Location: C-Berry 407!
Posts: 52
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the thing is its too straight forward. albeit very easy to relate to it doesnt necessarily have all that much depth. personally i like being able to read into things like poetry and song lyrics so i can expand on them and relate them not only to that subject matter and how it may relate to my life... but also i like to try and connect them to other feelings other emotions... it keeps the lyrics fresh and interesting... alive. maybe spice it up with some imagery... describe this evasive "thing" about this person. describe this past. is it crimson? living inside this person? does it show on the outside of this person?
describe this person. describe the feeling you get to see them in this way. basically... show us your feelings.
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