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Old 12-24-2005, 06:00 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Take her home, son

You took your time said we had all day/
I threw away your food and blew the fire on the candle away/
Sorry was a word that you didn't say/
This was supposed to be a relationship not end easily/

Take her home, son/
Look what she's done, son/
she's had a few, son/
she's had a few and then some/

I'm frightened what my parents might think/
Rubbing and patting your back as you're leaning over the kitchen sink/
Take her home, son, she's had too much too drink/
And on the way home you're asleep and it gives me time to think/

Take her home, son/
Look what she's done, son/
she's had a few, son/
she's had a few and then some/

Fights in the past but never this bad/
Tears of our hate cloud the visions in our eyes of what we once had/
Nearly Christmas but hard to be glad/
When no-ones around you and the one you love doesn't love you back...

Take her home, son/
Look what she's done, son/
she's had a few, son/
she's had a few and then some/
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Old 12-28-2005, 05:20 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I use that forward slash when I write music. I wouldn't say thats a bad thing with the song-you're looking at the lyrics, not the slashes after all...
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Old 12-28-2005, 12:14 PM   #3 (permalink)
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This sounds like some kind of country song hobo...it lacks some kind of a sting though...

Shut up webbed toes.
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Old 12-28-2005, 12:17 PM   #4 (permalink)
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The slashes ruin the entire song. In the immortal words of "somebody else who posts at these forums": Go play in the road, I'm sure the car's bumpers will welcome you.
I can think of a few slashes that would make an improvement to you...somewhere around the jugular, preferably.

Some one please ban this no-mark.
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Old 12-28-2005, 03:06 PM   #5 (permalink)
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I can think of a few slashes that would make an improvement to you...somewhere around the jugular, preferably.
friggin' awesome.
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Old 12-29-2005, 01:26 AM   #6 (permalink)
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oh its not morning anymore
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Old 12-30-2005, 05:21 AM   #7 (permalink)
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I can think of a few slashes that would make an improvement to you...somewhere around the jugular, preferably.

Some one please ban this no-mark.


and madeinNY this isn't a country song-it's a very British Indie song. Looking back I can see where you got the country comment from. Maybe I need to improve on this a touch.
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Old 12-30-2005, 08:58 AM   #8 (permalink)
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retouching never hurts After all, that's why models are so beautiful. hehe
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Old 12-30-2005, 09:00 AM   #9 (permalink)
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And retouching is also why you should never see the same prostitute twice.
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Old 12-30-2005, 09:03 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Hahah yet another quote from you that is going in my sig.

But hey, if I liked country music this song would kick ass
I know...It's not country music.
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