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Old 12-27-2005, 02:34 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Happy Holidays
I give to you one white dove
For i have the other
I give you this
So you will always know that you are loved
Even if we part
For as long as we both have each in our heart
Then we will truly never be apart
I gave my prayer for you to this dove
Who embraces this message
And will whisper it to the heavens
And to the Angels above
Happy Holidays


Cant seem to figure out
Cant seem to figure out
If we're still friends anymore
Things seem to be changing
And not for the better more
We thought we would be BFF
But i dont know if thats still true
I guess we'll have to go with the flow
And see if we carry on through
I dont really know if i can even trust you


Realization
Im drowning
Without your touch
Call me crazy
Crazy in love
You people gotta understand
Im lonely without my man
Come back to me
Forgive & Forget boo
If i could go back in time, i would
But i cant
Dont let this end this way

I had a lot of time to think of
How insane i was
Cant believe the foolish things
I, myself, committed
Thats over and done with hun
A new me, fresh start
Oh! How funny life is


Untitled
What did i do to you
To make you walk away
What did i say
To make you act this way
I'm on the edge of letting you go
Don't dare to think i won't do so
I don't need you to live


Realization & Untitled are not about me, just to get that clear.
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Old 12-27-2005, 02:39 PM   #2 (permalink)
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No wonder you lost your boyfriend if you gave him a dove.
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Old 12-27-2005, 02:48 PM   #3 (permalink)
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hobo be nice.

They are cliche...but they're kinda real I guess. It's how you feel. And there's nothing wrong with that...but to me, my favorite part of a poem is trying to decipher what it means...what your stuff does is just straight up...maybe you should work on that a little
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Old 12-27-2005, 04:58 PM   #4 (permalink)
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umm yeah and BFF? dont use things like that in a poem. and also use full words. like 'know' instead of 'kno' its not a msn conversation man, its a piece of artwork.
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Old 12-27-2005, 05:03 PM   #5 (permalink)
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No wonder you lost your boyfriend if you gave him a dove.

i gave the "dove" to my sister just to set it straight. Plus im still with my boyfriend, never lost him.

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Old 12-27-2005, 05:03 PM   #6 (permalink)
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umm yeah and BFF? dont use things like that in a poem. and also use full words. like 'know' instead of 'kno' its not a msn conversation man, its a piece of artwork.

Nicely said either/or, I think they are okay. Did you get the white dove thing from one of the Home Alone movies?
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Old 12-27-2005, 05:04 PM   #7 (permalink)
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moses, i'm thinking she got it from the 12 days of Xmass song....
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Old 12-27-2005, 05:09 PM   #8 (permalink)
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no moses is right, i got the idea off of Home Alone.

either/or, i dont use "kno" or abbreviations all the time
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Old 12-27-2005, 05:09 PM   #9 (permalink)
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Oh, sorry, my bad. lol
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Old 12-27-2005, 05:10 PM   #10 (permalink)
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fair enough crazy wild lover. just checking.
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