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Old 12-30-2005, 08:18 AM   #1 (permalink)
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My music, in sound, is like a Postal Service meets Bright Eyes- require a bit of time change, so while the syllables and stuff don't seem to line up quite right, they do in the actual songs. I like to tell stories in my lyrics and this one is called...

"Emergency, Doctor"


Emergency! First door on the right, straight on til morning....
Jump down! Seven flights of stairs, wet floor warning.

Emergency! Doctor cried, throat throttling fifth gear, wailing night.
Paddles Stat! Machines from beyond the curtains, white ceiling light.

There is a boy. Covered in life. There is a boy. Going under the knife.
Surgery, sense memory recall, the fall from the seesaw, scream!

Eight years. A decade not seen. Missing his teens. Instruments sheen.
Parents sob, behind closed doors, horrors of these echoes, scored.

Emergency! Resilience failing, heartbeat trailing, Doctor administer incision!
Nurses yell! Morphine dream, boys eyes open, white turning to cold cream.

Emergency! Seven thousand steps to the lowest depths of sanity. Climb.
The cut comes in stop-motion time. An inch of a fraction, centimeter life.

Breathing ceased! Chest is still! Doctor feeling the warm skin chill.
No! Not now! Doctor shouts and clasps the hands of a dying child.

Give me a minute, he pleads, and finishes his deeds, sewing up skin.
The crowds waits a moment, then a second and a moment again.

(we hear a cough and sputter and then a cheer)
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Old 12-30-2005, 08:34 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I really liked that. In fact, I loved that. Absolutely brilliant. I'm glad that there is finally as guy to prove Big3's comment wrong, that there is some hope for n00bs to this forum. I give you my Wandering Jew Badge Of Honour. Keep it up.
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Old 12-30-2005, 09:39 AM   #3 (permalink)
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I love it! AND it has a happy ending .

Yay! The great Big3 has been proven wrong...mark your calenders.
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Old 12-30-2005, 10:09 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm so pleased with myself!
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Old 12-30-2005, 05:54 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Hey Thanks a lot guys! I'm glad for the good feedback.
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Old 12-30-2005, 09:58 PM   #6 (permalink)
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I can see this as more of a spoken word piece that straight up song, but very, very nice.
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Old 01-01-2006, 02:03 AM   #7 (permalink)
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yeah its a good song but the way i pictured pissed me off because u used lots of !!exclamation points!! which made me read it as those bits been shouted. and i dont think bright eyes ever really shouts like that. and yes thank god for the happy ending, cheer all these dreary mofos up.
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Old 01-01-2006, 08:55 AM   #8 (permalink)
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well, bright eyes does shout, but not like you would think of - a SHOUT - uh, IE waste of paint is a bright eyes song, its like the line where he goes...

Will my number come up eventually? Like Love is some kind of lottery,
where you can scratch and see what is underneath. It's "Sorry",
just one cherry, "Play Again." Get lucky.

When he says play again, his voice rises and becomes pretty intense. Thats what the exclamation points are akin to.
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Old 01-04-2006, 12:55 AM   #9 (permalink)
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It's been two years since your eyes lost life,
where your soul drifts now is between you and
the forces that drive you, down, down there.
This grave plot invokes pity and sadness from,
passerbys and wandering eyes, I wonder...
what it means in the end, oh haunt me...
save my eyes, and on what noun will happiness depend?
Oh, no, no, your skull is dry, but your eyes do cry..
You know I just can't wait here any longer.
Don't take these words so lightly, dear...
I know my devotions are crystal clear,
And I'll visit you this same time every year,
But time is time, and something I value...
and although I wouldn't have made it this far without you...
I gotta move on...

Chorus
Every year, we gather around
this familiar ground, and I -
wonder, Oh, I wonder.
Life is like a ballroom dance,
every step is single sweet romance,
but one step off, one step on...
next you know and life is gone...
Oh I wonder....

It's been 4 years now, since your eyes lost life,
Now I'm married with a beautiful wife,
My house is big, 2 kids in tow, living complete.
The calendar pages are on the move,
one day its November, then it's June, yeah...
And each and every day, my thoughts of you go astray...
So I'll collect them in a little jar, and lay them here...
And just so you remember, I still love you dear...
And I'll visit you this same time every year,
But time is time, it's something I treasure,
My visits of course are of my own pleasure,
Though my cheeks are wet with love, yeah...
The sadness fades with every dove I see and oh...
Your grave stone is losing it's shiny hue,
and although I couldn't have made it this far without you...
I gotta move on...

chorus

It's been 50 years now, since your eyes lost life
I still have love, and my boys have wives,
I'm a grand father now, and getting here is tough.
Life is growing shorter, but it's not that rough.
I think I'll be seeing you soon, and yeah, I love the thought...
I'm different now, my eyes are watered my hands are wraught.
Making my way to your grave today was my last journey.
I feel the palpitations turning...
into slower beats, Oh God my chest is burning...
Take me now, use my pain to signal, dear, that you are near...
I just want to be numb to this but not your love.
Oh I hope the boys and kids don't cry, this wasn't so bad,
but no goodbye...

It looks like I won't be laying far away next year...
It looks like I won't be laying far away next year...
It looks like I won't be laying far away next year...

Life is like a ballroom dance, every step another new chance...
Yeah... I wonder...

It looks like I won't be laying far away next year...

Yeah, I wonder...

won't be laying....
wonder...
I won't be laying...
I wonder...
next year.... I won't be...
I....
laying far away...
Wonder...
next year...
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Old 01-04-2006, 08:42 AM   #10 (permalink)
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That was beautiful...so...there are no words. It is just one of the best things I've ever read, it brough tears to my eyes. I would really like to hear this recorded...this is my new favorite song...it was just beautiful.

I just have to ask though, why the sudden jump from 4 years to 50?
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