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Old 04-26-2006, 11:57 AM   #1 (permalink)
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I've washed my conscience down the drain
But know I’ll never be the same
Dragged you through my house
A total stranger
Make you wish you hadn’t come
Never gonna make it home

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Goodnight

You'll beg me to let you go but
I'm not that bright and not that slow
So shut up and stay quiet
I still haven't decided
What I will do
Make your worst nightmares come true

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Old 04-30-2006, 03:25 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.
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Old 04-30-2006, 06:18 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Nothing flows for me, rewrite it with different syllable counts or trash it.
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Old 05-01-2006, 09:48 AM   #4 (permalink)
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Chorus is awful and so is the You'll beg me to let you go but I'm not that bright and not that slow line.
Yeh I Agree ^
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Old 05-01-2006, 09:50 AM   #5 (permalink)
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i'll leave it the way it is! thanx for the comments
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Old 05-01-2006, 09:52 AM   #6 (permalink)
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Np Thats What Where Hear For Good Luck On Writing More In Future
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Old 05-01-2006, 09:55 AM   #7 (permalink)
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thanx smoggey, well swim and hobo don't get the point of the song/poem so i couldn't be bothered explaining it. if they were that good they would get the point and the style of the writing.
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Old 05-01-2006, 10:04 AM   #8 (permalink)
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Yeh Hmm Maybe Explain Next Time ?
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Old 05-01-2006, 10:07 AM   #9 (permalink)
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well i think that i shouldn't have to it's not that hard to see what it's about and the style of writing i'm going for!
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Old 05-01-2006, 10:09 AM   #10 (permalink)
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Yeh I Agree . But Some People See Things Differnt In Many Ways ? Like Look At Some Lyrics People Dont Get Them At All And Some People Do ! ! !
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