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Old 05-27-2006, 01:00 AM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Killing him killing her killing myself
all the woes of the world stacked on my shelf
****ing democracy it spreads its legs
while the men in suits play games with my head

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I never wanted more
I could find no less
Writing my name on the blackboard
humming 'This is just a TEST'.

Killing her killing him killing the children
With bright smiles and love that fills them
Play on their heartstrings, play on their heartstrings,
using the sharp edge of your knife

CHORUS
I never wanted more
I could find no less
Writing my name on the blackboard
humming 'this is just a TEST'


I'm pretty sure this is the first Punk song I've wrote. So I kinda do REALLY need your comments here.
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Old 05-27-2006, 01:03 AM   #2 (permalink)
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Its really good, like I could seriously picture that being a sick punk song.
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Old 05-27-2006, 01:08 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Yay. Maybe I should go into a Punk direction? What do you think?
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Old 05-27-2006, 01:09 AM   #4 (permalink)
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I don't know, I like this but I like your other stuff as well, like just keep it varied?
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Old 05-27-2006, 01:11 AM   #5 (permalink)
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Yeah, I'm just trying out everything at the moment. I'm still young so I can afford to spend a lot of time thinking about where I'm going with my music. I think I should write up a few more Punk songs though.
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Old 05-27-2006, 01:15 AM   #6 (permalink)
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WOW! I really loved it.. LOVED IT!

the opener was great.. I would change nothing about this song.. and i've thought this over.. re-read and what not.. and well its great.. wonderful.
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Old 05-27-2006, 09:12 AM   #7 (permalink)
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Try and make the 'punk song' longer in my view. It would be interesting to see where you carry this!
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