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Old 03-17-2007, 12:02 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Phrase of Purity, Poem of Nudity

Locked up in a tower of darkness
Blocked out within my mind
Sing the lyric of despair
Though my heart has a spark of flare
I shed bloody tears in the rain
I was victimized and I’m in pain

Don’t look at me with such strange eyes
That has target people’s doom and die
Its touches you, it’s been faded through
Then it’s turn into the light of truth
Don’t ask me why
I cannot deny
Though I will fly

Does it matter how we find the way to stop the world from coming after us
The gleaming shield around us are made of tasteful hopes and stardust
Glancing around arrogantly
Just don’t blame me for being lonely
I had no ambitions or dreams
Until later I have to come clean
Your words has changes my life
I couldn’t get myself to deprive
Please come and be with me
Till I know what I can be
And it was the phrase of Purity

I’m telling you that I’m not the same
Please listen to my song of shames
You have been bullied by bunch of fanatics
Its make my body surges with such static
Your bruises are deep like darken gale
That the cause is pain that left no trails

I’ve suffered with a bleeding heart
That you have gone through this yet so hard
I’m between the path of life and death
I’ll get a second chance if I draw my breath
I may have lied
But I will not hide
I’m on the tide

It won’t matter how we find the way to stop the world from coming after us
The shroud barrier around us are made of lustful hopes and sawdust
Glancing around arrogantly
Just don’t blame me for being lonely
I had no ambitions or dreams
Sooner or later I have to redeem
Your ways has changes my life
However it’s got me to deprive
Please come and be with me
Till I know what I can be
And it was the poem of nudity

I’ll prove to you that I have changed
Confessing to the world is my arrangement
I can’t bear to see you in such pain
Your spirit is fraught with severe strain
As long we’re together then nothing else matter
If the world is against us then their lives will shattered
They have seen the light and they’ve swallow their pride
The atmosphere is out and have subsided with the tide

Does it matter how we find the way to stop the world from coming after us
The gleaming shield around us are made of tasteful hopes and stardust
Glancing around arrogantly
Just don’t blame me for being lonely
I had no ambitions or dreams
Until later I have to come clean
Your words has changes my life
I couldn’t get myself to deprive
Please come and be with me
Till I know what I can be
And it was the phrase of Purity

It won’t matter how we find the way to stop the world from coming after us
The shroud barrier around us are made of lustful hopes and sawdust
Glancing around arrogantly
Just don’t blame me for being lonely
I had no ambitions or dreams
Sooner or later I have to redeem
Your ways has changes my life
However it’s got me to deprive
Please come and be with me
Till I know what I can be
And it was the poem of nudity
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Old 03-17-2007, 02:00 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I'm sorry: I couldn't get past the first stanza.
Minus the sorry part.
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I shed bloody tears in the rain
I was victimized and I’m in pain
These lines were what turned me off. Too cliche.

Oh, and rhyme schemes are overrated.
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Old 03-17-2007, 02:09 AM   #3 (permalink)
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Lmfao.
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Old 03-17-2007, 11:35 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I see, but it's always like that when it's only been read. other than that, is the grammer okay?

I kinda seen what you meant, but the tune i wrote required alot of rythm because without it, it sound like it has been cut off yet rambling on too.

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I shed bloody tears in the rain
I was victimized and I'm in pain
that part is a scenery part such as you seen a guy walking in the rain toward you, blood dripping out of his eyes, panting from the pain. the guy come up to you and say "I've been a victim of god, I've been bully by bikers" or whatever, it's just an example for creating image in mind.
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