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Old 12-07-2007, 06:26 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default travelling in tears

(verse 1)
i'm lost, and alone.
i am so lonely, i wish i had somebody.
so i go to the shore, stare off in the distance.
still don't feel accepted, degraded and rejected.

payphone, no home.
at least nowhere i stay for long.
when they wake up i'm usually gone.
cuz i like to travel, to see what unravels.
i usually just leave a scar, just don't find out who we are.

(bridge)
but i liked it there,
my skin was bare,
i wouldn't change it if i could.

i liked it there,
our skin was theirs,
and i still wouldn't change it.

(chorus)
back home. alone.
i kind of knew what i wanted here.
but it was neither far or near.

back home. alone.
i always knew what i wanted here.
now i am travelling in tears.

(verse 2)
time to be on my way.
im at sal's diner
on highway 49 and this time i'm not gonna mess it up, im gonna show you my feelings.
because even though you left last time and then you came back, i'm still healing.
(bridge)
(chorus)(2x)
(bridge 2)
the highway fades,
put on my shades,
and drive on down in to the light

the stars collide,
and im alright,
i'm on the road for good.

(chorus a few times then over)
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Old 12-08-2007, 02:35 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Meh...chorus was acceptable. I'd rewrite the verses. 4/10
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