nope, that's one word. mosaic rhymes are when you rhyme a long word with more than one short one:

thorazine
you're the queen

see how all three syllables match?

also, magazine doesn't rhyme with thorazine. they are identical in the last syllable. rhymes need to start with different consonants. zine/mean

I know what a rhyme is. I've never even heard the world Thorazine before ^^ so I don't think I did too badly.

There is nothing wrong with stepping outside the little song writing box every now and again, This might work better if you cut it down, a lot. To maybe like 4 lines? Its too long to have any impact, it just comes accross kinda lazy and unexciting. have a look at my new one if you have a minute.

haha your trying to turn songwriting into a science.... let it flow.. dont sit there and TRY to make lyrics..... when you do that it sucks.. i think these lessons you suggested for me were like a nazi camp...

Buuuurrrrrrn :rofl::thumb:

you might not like it, but undisciplined lyric writing usually results in unsingable lyrics

I wasn't aware lyrics HAD to be sung.

lyrics DONT need to be sung. they just need to be so well written that if people read them they will say "hey, i can sing this" but you dont HAVE to sing them...lol.

I think some of the best songs are the ones where you can read the lyrics on the page and have no idea how the hell anyone could sing it and make it sound good but they do.

lyrics are written for the ears, poetry is written for the eyes, and both have rules

I hate it when people make up for crappy lyrics by saying "it's a song." It's a cop out.