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Old 05-29-2008, 12:12 AM   #1 (permalink)
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This is my first thread and these are the first songs I've ever written. I usually don't have much to say ever but I was in a artsy mood this afternoon. They are jumbled and pretty elementary. maybe rate 1-10 (5-10) if you can read through.

-this one is anti-war. yah maaan. sounds wannabe punk
Fought all evening to stay afloat
to stay above your every quote
All you say, you only dote
on the ones who grasp your throat

And when your breath says combustion
when your mind's had its instruction
all your life's such a distraction
you won't ever see the destruction

Good thing you'll never think
but then you'd never speak...
of course I kid, you'd still repeat
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-this one is emooo and messed at the end
I can't live being liked
I've never done it
I need to think
I'm hated to be
Anything resembling me

Sooner or later
It will be seen
I'll never be
what you thought this thing
Anything resembling me

all throughout life
I've seen that face
all end in a sigh
ur smile's a phase
and from time to time
I'm sure you'll remember
but you'll be just fine
cause living love lives not in memory
it lives in the next in line.
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Old 06-16-2008, 01:47 PM   #2 (permalink)
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yo this was some ****ing good ****. Very original and a good prose with the syllables. You'd have to explain that last phrase for me though, "cause living love lives not in memory
it lives in the next in line".

That vagueness in your lyrics is something I am trying to acheive myself in my poetry. It's damn hard though. gj
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Old 06-17-2008, 10:18 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Haha thanks alot. I was about to stab my heart multiple times till you commented. haha I think that real (celebrated) lyricist, poets, and songwriters are really vague (I may just be stupid). at least for me i can hide (maybe not) my shortcomings by doing so. The last line ...has taken me a while to explain here. It's like when somebody leaves you and say they love you. When somebody really loves you but can't be with you for some reason. 'I love you, but I have to leave' ...They don't really love you they love who they are currently with....whoever is after you.
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Old 06-18-2008, 06:30 PM   #4 (permalink)
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yo that's deep.

can't say I really follow there. but I'll put some thought to it and next time I'm in here I'll maybe know what it means. you gotta comment my **** now it's posted on a new thread above ya!
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