My opinion then? Club Tropicanas lyrics are comparable with Shakespeare Soliloquies when sat next to your lyrics. High praise indeed.

Hey, I'm in your sig!

It's not been recorded

That's one positive about it.

But he's currently selling it to major labels... where the **** is the eyeroll emoticon?

But he didn't know that did he?
He just came storming at my lyrics like he was entering the ring at wrestle mania to fight against tugboat.
Imagine he was writing for MOJO.
"yeah, the song is **** and nothing like wrestling"
I take it all with a pinch of salt.

See in the slavery section people get irate but I don't mind people whoever they are. I go down Brixton and they say "alright Nathan, hows things.
I go up Camden they say "alright Nathan, hows it going"
I get along with people.
I go to Turkey and they bring me little cups of tea without milk and say "yes manchester united good" and I treat them with respect and then I tell them that in my country we sit on the toilet and they laugh and then I bid them farewell.
People are just people and you get all kinds.
No I don't mind Oojays point I just think he could be more eloquant especially as he said stop posting altogether while grind me down is a ****ing brilliant song.
It is about a drug dealer who works in the city by day to try to escape the nine to five and is beautiful with guitar.
But oojay probably prefers dukes of hazzard.

--But oojay probably prefers dukes of hazzard.--

Your very last line is basically bigotry and it makes a mockery of any arguments that you have in the 'Slavery' thread.

However I am digressing. The lyrics are nothing better than what is inside of a Christmas Card and Cliff Richard would'nt give you the time of the day with this track.

:laughing:

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cheers man.
It is about a drug dealer who works in the city by day and is trying to escape the 9-5 life so he can be free.
Most of my songs are about been free.
The rap song and the christmas song were just a joke off the top of my head but those other two are good songs man.
But words on paper mean little without sound.
There is breaks etc and stuff. It is like two way conversation echoing like a stoned daze.
The words mean little without the song as a whole I admit.
My rap song was just a joke. But don't rap songs that joke often come about?
I write comedy you see.

Chh...WHAT? STABS YOU WITH KNIVES.

yo, those lyrics are aight but it has no flow, may i suggest counting your syllables twice or maybe adding more compound words in. its all choppy.

a tip

if you cant recite it straight forward like you were reading a project

then its no good