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Old 10-19-2008, 02:16 PM   #11 (permalink)
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Oh, please. I'd never take my songwriting skillz to the mainstream. I'd never be able to write what I want to say. Instead I'd always be writing the same thing over and over again. :P

Indie > Mainstream amirite?

Oh, and here's a hopefully better chorus:
Creativity won't make the paper fall,
Unoriginality is the answer!
A song about the boy who took you for a fool
Revolutionary won't get you anywhere,
So write a song about how she kicked you in the family jewels
Familiarity will get your name written in history's halls.
WOW!!! The only thing i might change would be "it's" to "That's" in the third line.

Excellent ~ and, now, knowing that you'll not release it to the general public, i feel complimented that you chose us to share it with!

Thank you!
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Old 10-19-2008, 02:47 PM   #12 (permalink)
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You're very welcome, Wendy. Lol, I think I might have a fan. :o
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Old 10-19-2008, 03:05 PM   #13 (permalink)
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You're very welcome, Wendy. Lol, I think I might have a fan. :o
You DO, you DO!!!

Seriously? You do have a flair and talent, and i really do pray that you'll pursue your passions. Godspeed to you out there, Kane!

(And do me a favor? Change your s/n ~ you are WAY ABOVE a 'fail!' )
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Old 10-19-2008, 03:07 PM   #14 (permalink)
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Oh!

And the way things are, right now, with MB?

You might want to distance yourself from me...

Sad, but true.
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Old 10-25-2008, 01:29 AM   #15 (permalink)
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Indie > Mainstream amirite?
No not at ****ing all. Your indie artists who start getting popular go over to mainstream in time. So i guess that means you stop liking them as much.
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Old 10-25-2008, 07:23 PM   #16 (permalink)
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Lol, you do have a point there, but I'm not THAT biased. I still like my fair share of mainstream artists, but it's just that SOME music that are on the mainstream just baffles me. I usually end up thinking to myself, "How do people actually like this garbage?" and yeah. But, I'll just say that the underground also has it's fair share of bad artists. I'm too lazy to single anybody out at the moment, so yeah. :P
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Old 10-27-2008, 12:55 AM   #17 (permalink)
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This letter is to whom it may concern.
I've made the greatest discovery for the struggling bards,
For those hungry for fame,
For those who won't live with a shard,
For those who want a famous name.
Listen closely, for its a little absurd.

[Chorus]
In order for the paper to fall,
We need to settle for familiarity.
A song about the girl who pinned your heart to the wall
A song about the boy who couldn't resist Katie
In order for the paper to fall,
We need to settle for unoriginality.

[Chorus]

This letter is signed sincerely by anonymous
And you may be asking, "Who is he?"
He's another victim to this shameless game
And he refused to give in to their greed,
Only to be smacked into a state of lame
And now for the post script:
Please let this letter not send you down this path
Or else you will suffer the ordinary's wrath.


(I despise the second verse, in case if you're wondering. But I can't figure out a way to make it seem somewhat decent. Any suggestions?

Verse Chorus Verse formula = </3)

Like I told you, it was a little absurd
Take a little time to let the situation sink in
The colorblind masses can't seem to see it
Realize that we cannot win
Realize that we'll join them when we're beaten
Try as we might, the result is something we can't avoid.

I think that if you take out the "it" 3rd line last word, it will go better with win. See how that sounds.
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