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Old 11-20-2008, 06:06 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Couple poems...trying to turn into lyrics. Please help

Remembered Love

"Lights dimmed, thoughts disappear,

Actions that are not my own.

Lights come back, thoughts return,

The actions remain involuntary.

A stare that enchants, a touch that paralyzes;

Seduction at its peak absorbs me like a dream.

A lusty illusion embraces me;

Lust turns to love, as ice to water…

Will you stay?

Such a mocking thought to play with one's heart;

I hesitate a motion, but stray a second more.

The hesitation is noticed;

The sight of you is numbing, however,

Motion is a stalemate.

-Suspended in time, all else non-existant;

Show me the beauty of endless passion.

Show me the heart behind the wall,

…the forbidden fruit of desire.

Murmurs of fear fade into the warmth of your voice,

I am almost free of this entrapment.

Lace my fingertips with the key to that door,

So that I may free you from this entrapment, endangerment,

this prospective hell.

I escaped tonight.

I don't know what from, or where to, or how…

All I know is that I am gone,

But I am not alone."


My heart trembles in anger.
I can feel the darkness take over.
The mask is slowly consuming my face.
Why must you make me feel this way?


A strong word that sums up my feelings.
An ugly word I'd hoped to get rid of.
But my eyes are glowing,
Burning with the desire to obliterate.


That is in itself a sin.
A sin against the god you believe.
Why is it that you center yourself around it?
You have taken that sin and made it your personal army.

The Gods have blessed me with the intelligence to combat your anger.

My hatred.

If you only realized the sheer destruction I can cause,
Maybe then, you'd stop.
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Old 11-29-2008, 02:51 PM   #2 (permalink)
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anyone please?
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Old 12-02-2008, 12:23 AM   #3 (permalink)
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What do you need help with? I think they are fine pieces of poetry and could easily be turned into lyrics.
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Old 12-02-2008, 04:42 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I want to know HOW exactly to turn them into I want to learn how to write a song. I dunno if just anyone can do it, but if I can learn, I'll do anything to learn it.
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Old 12-04-2008, 01:49 PM   #5 (permalink)
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you don't need to know how to turn these into lyrics...what you need to know is how to write a chord progression and a melody. the lyrics are good, and will work fine as lyrics. it's the music you need now, my man.
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Old 12-07-2008, 12:06 PM   #6 (permalink)
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You don't need to use every line of the poem in the melody and rhythm, just remember to fit the rhythm and melody. It's almost secondary that you get your point across it seems, as long as you know what it means.
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