Review My Catchy Pop/Acoustic/Indie Song? (lyrics, myspace, shows)

01-20-2009, 08:21 PM

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Wifey Boozer · 01-22-2009, 05:53 AM

I don't know if you're being stupid or cute. But it's not cute and you're coming across real stupid.

yoboe · 01-22-2009, 12:42 PM

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Mike Smith · 01-22-2009, 02:49 PM

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Originally Posted by yoboe

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Originally Posted by Wifey Boozer

I don't know if you're being stupid or cute. But it's not cute and you're coming across real stupid.

Who were you talking to wifey?

Me or yoboe?

Cause i wasnt meaning you when i said that whole thing about not having a life, because you said nothing rude to me

Double X · 01-22-2009, 03:38 PM

Why is your goal to make something cliched? This might have been a filler song 40 years ago...but now...

01-22-2009, 03:40 PM

lol @ vocals on myspace page.

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Originally Posted by Double X

Why is your goal to make something cliched?

Who makes music because they believe in it? As a fellow musician I can honestly say that there is a thing known as business. Perhaps you should study it. Rumor has it that if you're good at making music with no soul that you can be cool and get mad bitches.

Mike Smith · 01-22-2009, 04:56 PM

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Originally Posted by The Unfan

lol @ vocals on myspace page.
Who makes music because they believe in it? As a fellow musician I can honestly say that there is a thing known as business. Perhaps you should study it. Rumor has it that if you're good at making music with no soul that you can be cool and get mad bitches.

lol yes i realize my vocals arent sounding so good on the myspace page...But thats why they're called ROUGH DEMOS

They're not studio recorded, not even recorded professionally

And they're unmixed and unmastered so they sound crappy compared to a mixed/mastered version i could do eventually.

Anyways i make music because i believe in it, just because i wrote one cliche song doesnt mean my other ones dont have meaning.

I've written songs about war, the election, suicide prevention, domestic abuse, love gone awry and much more

So my songs have much heart poured into them

So please dont think im some ass just looking to make a quick buck somehow

WWWP · 01-22-2009, 05:02 PM

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Originally Posted by Mike Smith

So please dont think im some ass just looking to make a quick buck somehow

Oh, why would anyone think that?

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Originally Posted by Mike Smith

haha it may be a bit cliche

but songs like these sell to record labels and managers when searching =]

yoboe · 01-23-2009, 06:39 PM

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Originally Posted by The Unfan

lol @ vocals on myspace page.
Who makes music because they believe in it? As a fellow musician I can honestly say that there is a thing known as business. Perhaps you should study it. Rumor has it that if you're good at making music with no soul that you can be cool and get mad bitches.

there is also a thing known as respect...
unless ur being sarcastic then its cool lol

and mike, your song is good, people just think the lyrics are "old" an cliche. i guess you could add/change some words to make it different from every other song. use some dissonant words, alliterations and rhetoric like that. but whether people like your song is different from if they like the lyrics. if the song is catchey and shows your musical talent people will still like it

Mike Smith · 01-23-2009, 08:05 PM

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Originally Posted by yoboe

there is also a thing known as respect...
unless ur being sarcastic then its cool lol

and mike, your song is good, people just think the lyrics are "old" an cliche. i guess you could add/change some words to make it different from every other song. use some dissonant words, alliterations and rhetoric like that. but whether people like your song is different from if they like the lyrics. if the song is catchey and shows your musical talent people will still like it

Well at least someone here is being nice and describing it in a way that doesnt piss me off :] haha

Thanks yoboe

I understand what you're saying

I wish people would have said that to begin with though so this whole almost war type thing wouldnt have started haha

I wrote the song as i was listening to another artist and based my song off his song

So it is kind of cliche which i realize

But i dont think ill change the lyrics because i have the perfect beat in my head for the song and the lyrics i wrote

And if i change the lyrics the beat wont match

But thanks yoboe :]

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