actually the lyrics were improvised in fact the entire recording was an improvised song, not much of it was planned

Oh! That's interesting, Stone Birds...I couldn't tell that your song was improvised. I am impressed that the song hung together as well as it did given that you were making up the lyrics as you sang them!

some newer remixes:

We Were Promised Jetpacks - Conductor (Stone Birds Remix) FatCat Records - We Were Promised Jetpacks - Conductor (Stone Birds Remix) - SoundCloud THIS WON A REMIX CONTEST

Stars - We Don't Want Your Body (Stone Birds Remix) Stars | MXP4 (click on vote for other versions, then most recent mine will say Stone Birds)

The Gravel Road
 

Listen to it HERE

Move along
At a steady pace
don’t leave
a single trace

cause or I’ll find you
in the woods
in the the caves
it’s no good

you’ve got a problem
I’ve got a problem
Let’s get together
And make more problems

You take your time
To follow me
well why don’t you
just say something

those shining lights
the street fights
did ya get the clue
that it was all for you

Love is a lie
Yes I know
But oooh oh

There’s really no point
It’ll never happen
So why oh why

Did we feel this way for eachother
And didn’t even say a single word

Driving on the gravel road
We will never do
What we’re told

The book is burned
The dog is dead
The car is stolen
And so was my bed



But that’s okay
That’s alright
Cause we know how to put up a fight

We will sing until the clocks strikes
5 hours after midnight

low and behold I am the god
that you were thinking of

I’m that narcissistic
That sarcastic
But that’s why you like me

Am I that foolish
That unobservant
Is it true

Love is a lie
Yes I know
But oooh oh

There’s really no point
It’ll never happen
So why oh why

Did we feel this way for eachother
And didn’t even say a single word


feedback would be appreciated

Alice & Abel Met on the train
they didn't say much but they felt the same pain



i'll try to upload the instrumental for this some other time

The general theme of the song as i read it is someone(perhaps yourself personally) encountering a new sense of Self-awareness. The song focuses on a fact "love is a lie" and extrapolates from there to relate to a personal situation from the songwriter/singer.

The aspect of self awarness in the song and maybe coming to grips with a "fact" but then circumstantially wishing it were otherwise- seems to be like a conversation with oneself or your conscience maybe? Maybe like the voice of reason?

My boss won't stop yakkin at me while I write this so hopefully it loks like a complete train of thought that relates to your song lol.

Oh yeah talking about your gravel road song. I don't knoww if this is the kind of input your looking for but as a song writer myself I like the lyrics and thought I'd share.

Stone Birds - "The Tide Will Come In"

Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me

we have no control over the lives our brothers
we have no control over the lives our sisters

Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me
Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me

my brothers my sisters stop playin god you'll never win
my brothers my sisters don't tread in the garden

Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me
Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me

Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me
Someday the tide will come in
someday my love will return to me

Someday the tide will come in

Stone Birds, I like the main idea of the song.

One recommendation I have is for the vocals. It sounds like you have used your voice in chorus/harmony throughout the song. Have you considered just having some segments where you sing in a strong solo voice without the background harmony? The harmony gives the vocals a droning feel.

Also, since you repeat the same lines again and again, sometimes it got repetitive to me. I felt you could increase the volume of some of the background instrumentals that disappear in the mix. For example, were you using some harmonica? I thought I heard it very faintly. Making these background instrumentals stand out more could give more uniqueness to the different segments of the song.

there's no harmonica, there is a kazoo and it plays atleast once within every bar after the intro

"White Laces"
 

"White Laces" stream on Soundcloud (this is a link)

Did you
need a
friend

That you
could
rely on

To make you feel
Better
To heal your wounds

When we die
Where do we go
If you’re in heaven I do not know

How could they
Say
“Go kill yourself”

they put you down
they singled you out
well you showed them, didn’t ya?

You took a rope
Attached it to the ceiling
And there you were

When we die
Where do we go
If you’re in heaven I do not know

You were floating above your bed
Like an angel with white laces

On the day
of your funeral
they will cry

cause they know
that they’re the reason
that you died from suicide

and all of them
will stand over
your grave

When we die
Where do we go
If you’re in heaven I do not know

Birds are singing of your pain
for ye white laces, ye blood hath stained