Nicktarist

I personally would've found a metaphor that would be consistant through the entire song (for instance, I've got a song back in my thread that uses a train as a reference to progression and success). When I say the train stopped or fell on it's side, it means that things seem to stand still and never get done or go forward. Time stands still (as it may). So here, I would sit and think what the most consistant representation of PETA would probably be:

a crafty snake?
a street dealer?
a confused lemming? (A lemming with the locket?)

then I'd take that and advance it every few lines:

That's how I would technically approach the poem (even those are terrible metaphors).

In reference to my criticism of PETA, I would certainly point out that they follow their ideology like lemmings, often forcing them off a cliff of sanity and into a sea of contradiction and deceit. I'd try to get to the very root of the problem and point out how impossible it is for people to (in general) admit that they are wrong. It takes allot (I know from expirience).

What you have though is absolutely perfect for the cause and doesn't require my input to be effective.

peace out,
-nick

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