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Old 07-04-2009, 12:49 AM   #11 (permalink)
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Very good I like it. Acoustic electric?
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Old 07-04-2009, 12:53 AM   #12 (permalink)
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Very good I like it. Acoustic electric?
Nope, just a crummy old Yamaha acoustic that I bought when I was about 16 I just used the built-in camera and mic from my apple laptop to record it.
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Old 07-04-2009, 12:56 AM   #13 (permalink)
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Nope, just a crummy old Yamaha acoustic that I bought when I was about 16 I just used the built-in camera and mic from my apple laptop to record it.
Have you thought about putting a mic into it? All you would really need is a drill, and the right sized bit.
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Have you thought about putting a mic into it? All you would really need is a drill, and the right sized bit.
I have thought about it actually, especially for playing at venues and not having to mic it up dodgily. But then I always think, no, I'll just wait til I can actually buy a new guitar since this one is shite. That or, who cares, I'm an amateur and I can't be bothered going to the effort when I don't sound that great anyway! Haha. Plus, I wouldn't know exactly how to go about it :S
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I have thought about it actually, especially for playing at venues and not having to mic it up dodgily. But then I always think, no, I'll just wait til I can actually buy a new guitar since this one is shite. That or, who cares, I'm an amateur and I can't be bothered going to the effort when I don't sound that great anyway! Haha. Plus, I wouldn't know exactly how to go about it :S
Basically all you would need to do is take out the bottom strap holder and replace it with a patch cord plugin (that connects into a mic put inside the guitar and held down)

Personally I would never buy an acoustic electric because they typically lose sound quality and cost more than if you made it an electric yourself.

If you wanted to learn more about how to do this, just go to your local guitar shop.



edit: What key is the song in (I thought Dmaj?)
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Old 07-04-2009, 03:18 AM   #16 (permalink)
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Basically all you would need to do is take out the bottom strap holder and replace it with a patch cord plugin (that connects into a mic put inside the guitar and held down)

Personally I would never buy an acoustic electric because they typically lose sound quality and cost more than if you made it an electric yourself.

If you wanted to learn more about how to do this, just go to your local guitar shop.



edit: What key is the song in (I thought Dmaj?)
Cool, I will check it out and perhaps look into it more....

& I think this song is in G, the chords for the verses are Em, G and the chords for the chorus' are C, Em, C, Em, C, G. Very basic!

Thanks heaps for your feedback
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Old 07-07-2009, 03:07 PM   #17 (permalink)
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i really love this song, and your accent makes it interesting (in a good way of course.)
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Old 07-11-2009, 11:25 AM   #18 (permalink)
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Thanks. That's my favourite line out of the song also.



I'm not a diehard fan of Missy Higgins but I am familiar with her stuff. Anyway, thanks

Here is a video version. I've shortened it and adapted it to an acoustic version, normally it's a band thing. enjoy. or not.

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Old 07-18-2009, 12:22 AM   #19 (permalink)
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Okay so this thread is where I'm going to write and develop my own and my band's song lyrics and poetry. I might even post some of them in video form!

To start off, this is one of the first songs we wrote and it's called 'Amy.' It's about a girl we went to high school with who took her own life in 2004. We've matured lots as songwriters since but this song is still very special to us.

R.I.P. Amy
Hi, Kate,
Your song about Amy is lovely. It reminds me of a friend I made at the end of senior year in high school. We hung out one evening together on a band trip and got to know each other for the first time. I was going to be out of the country next year, and he asked me to write him. Well, at the end of my year abroad, I finally was getting ready to write him when I heard through the grapevine that he had just killed himself with a gun, with drug addiction perhaps being involved. Afterwards I kicked myself, saying, "Aarggh! If only I'd written him sooner! If only I'd..." if only, if only, etc., etc.

It is hard for those left living after people kill themselves, because of course if we had known of their suffering we would have reached out beforehand. If there is anything good that comes from suicide (and I don't think there is), it is the fact that it serves as a reminder to me to try to reach out to people when we can. You just never know who will appreciate it/who needs it.

The lines I like especially are the following, because they succinctly use metaphors to describe that Amy had within herself both the ignition source (the embers, flame, and match) and the combustible material (her soul, written on loose-leaf paper) to destroy herself:

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Her hair was made of embers
There was a flame in her eye to match
She picked up boys in Melbourne bars
But still she was detached

Her car was lined with tiny bits
Of paper, scribbly prose
She said she kept her soul on loose-leaf
and made all of her own clothes
I feel the saddest line is that she made her own clothes, because this line shows both her detachment from others (and her self-dependence), as well as, conversely, her ability to care for herself...because sewing clothes is a time-intensive and creative labor of love. How sad that she was able to spend so much effort caring for herself, but eventually did herself the ultimate harm. The line about picking up boys in Melbourne bars works well because it shows how she was both looking for some emotional connection she appears to have been lacking, yet also when alive was engaging in self-destructive behavior (risky dating practices)...setting the stage for the final self-destructive behavior.

I have two questions about your song and wording, Kate. If I didn't know the story behind the song, or if I didn't know the title, while listening to the song I wouldn't understand that Amy had killed herself, although one guesses it from the title, R.I.P. Amy, and some of the lyrics that show there was the fire within her ready to spark and consume her. Do you want somehow to hint more strongly in the song that she killed herself, or do you prefer it to not be so obvious?

The second question is about a few word choices. When you write:
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Amy come drive with me
we'll elope from all this mess
Roll up your sleeves don't be ashamed
put on your prettiest dress
to me "elope" is a word only used when a couple elope to get married suddenly rather than stay and plan a big public wedding. I have never actually ever heard it used to mean anything other than this in the U.S., even though the dictionary does describe "elope" as also meaning escape. Perhaps in Australian English "elope" is commonly used to mean escape? I'm wondering if instead of elope you might consider writing, "We'll escape from all this mess."

A second word choice question is about "roll up your sleeves." To me this phrase/cliche means "get to work." I'm wondering, again, if perhaps it has a different meaning in Australian English rather than in American English? Does it perhaps mean to you the same as "relax" or "unbutton your collar?" The phrase that I think of when I think of someone (female) relaxing/unwinding is "let your hair down." Reading your lyrics made me consider this issue of how English songs are understood differently depending on where the English-speakers originate, since each country must have its own interpretations of words and sayings, even when the words and sayings are the same.

You sing the song very sweetly!

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Old 07-18-2009, 04:16 AM   #20 (permalink)
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Haha it is weird to hear online people speak.. especially with my weirdo accent. But shucks, thanks
I find it refreshing to hear an Australian accent again and I start to wonder how I ever lost mine.

I like your song and I agree with Lee on the greatness of that line.


Btw do you want me to rename the thread to lateralus' songs? It still shows up as shiseido's.
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