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mr dave 12-12-2009 02:05 PM

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Originally Posted by bogey_j (Post 783152)
stop using confining/reductive terms to describe my lyrics. it's not meant to be deep or plainly descriptive. it just is.

get used to it, especially if you plan on continuing to misrepresent yourself in the future.

so if you're writing about a fish, and it's about a fish, how is it not plainly descriptive?

and if you're presenting it as something that will probably go over most people's heads how is it not a pretentious attempt at seeming deep when you had already determined that you were writing a clear and direct description?

bogey_j 12-12-2009 03:32 PM

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Originally Posted by mr dave (Post 783387)
get used to it, especially if you plan on continuing to misrepresent yourself in the future.

so if you're writing about a fish, and it's about a fish, how is it not plainly descriptive?

and if you're presenting it as something that will probably go over most people's heads how is it not a pretentious attempt at seeming deep when you had already determined that you were writing a clear and direct description?

I'll post this again since your brain has trouble processing this. I'll even bold it

it just is. its obvious you and me are in two different universes and will never be on the same wavelength about anything.

mr dave 12-12-2009 03:56 PM

i don't have any hassle processing the fact that you're trying to back peddle and avoid my simple questions.

here's a pro-tip for the next forum you join: don't assume all the members are morons.

iron9567 12-14-2009 02:51 PM

My friend is a fish
he lives in my room.
his fin is a cloud.
he sees me when I sleep

hmmmmm,
I was going to reply with what i can a courtesy reply to this. But after seeing some of the snide comments you have made to other people on here. You start off saying this poem will go over your head. How do you figure a four line stanza is suppose to go over peoples head. It can be done with only four lines. But you'll have to get a stronger set of metaphors then what you have. Why do you only have four lines also? Why not write more lines to this poems. You make it sound like you're trying to get all deep on us. I'll be honest and say this isn't even poetry and more like paint by numbers that got the colors mixed up. In other words i find this juvenile and you need to try to work on it more.
thanks
the iron man

Freebase Dali 12-14-2009 02:59 PM

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Originally Posted by bogey_j (Post 783421)
I'll post this again since your brain has trouble processing this. I'll even bold it

it just is. its obvious you and me are in two different universes and will never be on the same wavelength about anything.


Correct.
In your universe, you're awful at writing poetry.
In ours, we realize it.

anticipation 12-14-2009 03:05 PM

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Originally Posted by Freebase Dali (Post 784429)
Correct.
In your universe, you're awful at writing poetry.
In ours, we realize it.

clean up on aisle BOOM.

storymilo 12-14-2009 03:47 PM

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Originally Posted by AwwSugar (Post 783211)
Tennis?
I THOUGHT THIS WAS COOKING CLASS.

It is. We're making fish tonight.

iron9567 12-14-2009 04:32 PM

Trust me youre better off throwing the fish on the bank its to bony to get any decent meat from it

HotFunkColdPunk 12-15-2009 08:55 PM

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Originally Posted by wolverinewolfweiselpigeon (Post 783165)
i didn't think "fish" or "jesus." i just thought "shit."




ohsnap.

hahahaha!

Arya Stark 12-16-2009 03:42 PM

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Originally Posted by storymilo (Post 784472)
It is. We're making fish tonight.

And what else?


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