Things That I Wrote

~~[MERIT]~~ · 07-15-2011, 09:51 PM

I don't write alot, but per the rules, I started a thread dedicated to the times that I do. Here's something that I wrote. It's part of a song (well, just a chorus/verse/chorus so far). I'll be adding more in the future as it comes to me, or not, but most likely.

Quote:

Why is it me, and why's it okay?
I put it to the test, but I can't do it every day.
I love it in hindsight, but hate it today.
I had you in my heart, but now my heart has gone away.

I miss your face, the soft of your touch. I’m flippin’ through your pictures, but sometimes pictures ain't enough. I told you that I loved you. I held your hand and kissed your lips. Ran my fingers through your hair, put my hands upon your hips.

You had my heart. I gave it to you every chance. I still remember the look in your eyes the first time we ever danced. I felt your soul, your head upon my chest. Those were the good times, and these are just the rest.

Why is it me, and why’s it okay?
I put it to the test, but I can’t do it every day.
I love it in hindsight, but hate it today.
I had you in my heart, but now my heart is gone away.

cardboard adolescent · 07-29-2011, 11:15 AM

I like it, the only thing I don't like is the use of 'upon,' feels a little weird. But otherwise I really like it. Flows well.

~~[MERIT]~~ · 07-29-2011, 07:00 PM

Hooray for the creative expression that is ushered in by divorce and heartbreak.

richie1 · 07-29-2011, 07:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oojay

Hooray for the creative expression that is ushered in by divorce and heartbreak.

oojay, Take full advantage and turn something negative into something positive. I did some of my best writing after my divorce. I also had a very creative period when I finally started opening myself up to possible new romance. Damn, I was writing as much as I did during my teen years! It was a very cool period.

~~[MERIT]~~ · 07-30-2011, 11:07 AM

I just wanna offer a little bit of insight into my mind’s eye. Into the reasons that I get so high that I wanna die. The reasons that my f*ckin’ brain is fried, and why my eyes are cried out to the point where my soul has dried out and died out. You see, I tried to buy love. That is, I gave a girl all my love. Leavin’ myself with no love, and no love lost. The biggest cost was my heart, when my heart crossed, and got hit by a f*ckin’ bus. How’s that for a life that’s f*ckin’ just?

07-29-2011, 11:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
cardboard adolescent ;) Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: CA Posts: 3,503	I like it, the only thing I don't like is the use of 'upon,' feels a little weird. But otherwise I really like it. Flows well.

07-29-2011, 07:00 PM	#3 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	Hooray for the creative expression that is ushered in by divorce and heartbreak.

07-30-2011, 11:07 AM	#5 (permalink)
~~[MERIT]~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Missouri, USA Posts: 4,814	I just wanna offer a little bit of insight into my mind’s eye. Into the reasons that I get so high that I wanna die. The reasons that my fckin’ brain is fried, and why my eyes are cried out to the point where my soul has dried out and died out. You see, I tried to buy love. That is, I gave a girl all my love. Leavin’ myself with no love, and no love lost. The biggest cost was my heart, when my heart crossed, and got hit by a fckin’ bus. How’s that for a life that’s f*ckin’ just?