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Old 05-22-2005, 05:33 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Default Dawn of Deception

The lack of emotion, respect and devotion,
and hollow stare emerging from his eyes
There not in spirit, noone would admit it,
They knew they were wrong, to feed him the lies

His function; rejection, His life; imperfection
Yet never before had his view been so clear
His hopes had been shattered, he'd thought he had mattered
Now he had no idea why he was here

Alone on this planet, he won't make amends
Devoid of compassion, betrayed by his friends
Stuck in the middle, not dead or alive,
And noone's around to see if he'll survive
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These Lyrics are from our punk band, AlPaJoDa.
Strung Out inspired me to write this song
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Old 05-23-2005, 09:55 AM   #2 (permalink)
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you seem sad. the rhyme scheme is nice however some of the wording (notably the second stanza) seesm cliched
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