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Old 06-10-2016, 10:21 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Something I wrote working on a song. Some opinions please.

If I loved you, itd be pain
If i held you, itd be insane
Im better off in the dirt
Better off, as a dead flirt

Lick me with eyes of steel
I hate to feel
She is my only passion
As the walls come crashin

She was perfection to me
She is imperfect to everybody
Wind blows into her beauty
She loves everybody

You told me
Youd never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections

I wonder if your blood is gold
If your eyes are bold
If your mind is dull
If you have a soul

I know, I am numb
I know, I am dumb
I hear, beating drum
I see, I am crumb

Jesus was aborted
Jesus was aborted
Jesus was deserted
Jesus was deserted

You told me
Youd never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections


I love her, yes I do
I hate her, yes I do
I need her, yes I do
I crave her, yes I do
Yes I do (x4)

You told me
Youd never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections

I love her, yes I do
I hate her, yes I do
I need her, yes I do
I crave her, yes I do
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Old 06-10-2016, 11:07 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.
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Old 06-10-2016, 11:24 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.
Can't tell if this is sarcasm or not. Lol
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Well, it would fit right in.
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Old 06-10-2016, 11:47 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.
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I give it a 69/420
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I'll give you a 69/420
I'll give you both a 138/840
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Better off as a dead flirt?
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