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Blank. 06-10-2016 11:21 PM

Judge me
 
Something I wrote working on a song. Some opinions please.

If I loved you, it’d be pain
If i held you, it’d be insane
I’m better off in the dirt
Better off, as a dead flirt

Lick me with eyes of steel
I hate to feel
She is my only passion
As the walls come crashin

She was perfection to me
She is imperfect to everybody
Wind blows into her beauty
She loves everybody

You told me
You’d never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections

I wonder if your blood is gold
If your eyes are bold
If your mind is dull
If you have a soul

I know, I am numb
I know, I am dumb
I hear, beating drum
I see, I am crumb

Jesus was aborted
Jesus was aborted
Jesus was deserted
Jesus was deserted

You told me
You’d never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections


I love her, yes I do
I hate her, yes I do
I need her, yes I do
I crave her, yes I do
Yes I do (x4)

You told me
You’d never leave
What a fool I must be
To sit there and believe
In your own imperfections
In your own misdirections

I love her, yes I do
I hate her, yes I do
I need her, yes I do
I crave her, yes I do

grindy 06-11-2016 12:07 AM

Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.

Blank. 06-11-2016 12:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by grindy (Post 1708137)
Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.

Can't tell if this is sarcasm or not. Lol

grindy 06-11-2016 12:46 AM

Well, it would fit right in.

Key 06-11-2016 12:47 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by grindy (Post 1708137)
Needs more "ooh, baby" and girl-world rhymes.

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YorkeDaddy 06-11-2016 10:46 AM

I give it a 69/420

Key 06-11-2016 10:59 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by YorkeDaddy (Post 1708276)
I give it a 69/420

I'll give you a 69/420

Ol’ Qwerty Bastard 06-11-2016 11:22 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ki (Post 1708280)
I'll give you a 69/420

I'll give you both a 138/840

RoxyRollah 06-11-2016 12:47 PM

I dont judge people I a Christian......Jew ;).:p

Zhanteimi 06-11-2016 04:38 PM

Better off as a dead flirt?


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