stuck (music and lyrics, punk, goth, quote, song)

[Schizotypic]

I don't think that is either a metaphor or a simile. It's more of a hyperbole.
...little emo children make me want to eat babies.

[Schizotypic]

Originally Posted by deep_and_depressing

NOOOOO NEVER!!!!!

Do it! Do it! Do it!

[likuidcoka]

You are my life's ambition
and I've been waiting for you to
save me from myself come on
there's no admission
we're both on our way to hell

that lil part stood out to me for some reason.

Lets got to HEll, but together.

[deep_and_depressing]

Originally Posted by Schizotypic

Do it! Do it! Do it!

Tried. Failed. Never again.

[deep_and_depressing]

Originally Posted by Schizotypic

I don't think that is either a metaphor or a simile. It's more of a hyperbole.
...little emo children make me want to eat babies.

I'm not emo. I'm a perky goth.

[adidasss]

Is it a joke song?

[deep_and_depressing]

This was inspired by a book. The main character is pretty much allergic to light.
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Tears fill my eyes
as I work to surpress
building feelings of
sadness and stress.
Will myself to the shadows,
let the darkness overcome.
With any luck I won't live
to see tomarrow's sun.

[chorus]
Live in the darkness,
thrive in the night.
Never be ashamed to
shy away from the light.
Learn to love this inky black
for it has much to offer and
nothing does it lack.

Hide in the shadows,
we aren't welcome in the light.
But none of that matters if you
play your cards right.
Drink in the black of ink,
let it rush through poisoned veins.
And shrink away as the sun rises again.

[chorus]

Hide from flouresence and
harmful ultraviolet rays.
Welcome the shadowed presence
at the end of every day.
Kill the power,
throw the switch.
The light burns through me,
every inch

[chorus]

Safe in the dark
from unwanted illumination.
Hidden from the heart
of angry words and accusations.[x2]

[chorus]
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I haven't edited this one yet and I'm having some issues with the flow.

[deep_and_depressing]

Sort of-I guess? It doesn't apply to my life anymore. I just like it-I guess?

[Arya Stark]

You guys seem fine.

So I don't know what this is all about.

I think we've come to the point that the conversation is no longer about music and lyrics.

[TheBig3]

Originally Posted by deep_and_depressing

This stabbing pain fills my heart when I hide how I feel today
And I can’t even find the words to say.

Too many new guys look at poetry and think they can get away with anything. likes its madlibs and you just plug **** in.

For example "this stabbing pain fills my heart"

first off, "fills my heart" is a cliche. These are to be avoided.

secondly, is stabbing pain a liquid? This is a rule breaker, and those are fine but you can always tell te guys whos breaking rules when he doesn't know what the rule is...or that he's even breaking one.

Things appear haphazard but they never are, and if anything points a guy out as new to the craft, thats it.