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Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-11-2009, 08:33 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
No more replies? Alright, here's the next on the...

No more replies? Alright, here's the next on the album:

Beauty
Oh, beauty,
twisted and lovely
you've become frail and lonely,
supported by wire
I mistook for hair
running my fingers though...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-09-2009, 07:46 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
Thank you, I am quite pleased to hear that, as my...

Thank you, I am quite pleased to hear that, as my ultimate goal in songwriting is to make my lyrics as emotional as possible... and sometimes I feel like I can lose people when I do this because the...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-09-2009, 01:56 PM
Replies: 138
Views: 15,585
Posted By Naked
I agree with Nick here, "pretty lights" loses...

I agree with Nick here, "pretty lights" loses it's effect... I understand the idea for repetition, but I feel it needs to be more subtle here... Try making the adjective in place of "Pretty" match...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-07-2009, 08:20 PM
Replies: 63
Views: 5,503
Posted By Naked
Wow, I'm impressed far beyond what I normally...

Wow, I'm impressed far beyond what I normally read here. Your use of diverse and unusual rhyme schemes show signs of confidence in straying from the norm, and your alliteration is subtle but makes...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-07-2009, 12:33 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
Thank you Raven, I know I write sort of abstract...

Thank you Raven, I know I write sort of abstract so when someone tells me my song makes perfect sense it is one of the best compliments you can give me.
Here's the next on the album... I didn't know...
Forum: Indie & Alternative 08-03-2009, 03:34 PM
Replies: 28
Views: 4,130
Posted By Naked
I've been a huge fan of The Antlers for a while...

I've been a huge fan of The Antlers for a while now. Hospice is great, but In The Attic Of The Universe is growing on me a lot.
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-03-2009, 03:12 PM
Replies: 559
Views: 80,765
Posted By Naked
It seems with this song "muddle puddle" that you...

It seems with this song "muddle puddle" that you just wrote off the top of your head... Which can produce good results, but I don't feel any emotion coming from this song, just tired cliches and...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 08-03-2009, 11:17 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
Any other comments on either of these songs...

Any other comments on either of these songs before I post another?
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-31-2009, 12:33 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
Military Horns His ears have sunk back into ...

Military Horns
His ears have sunk back into
his skull to escape the cracks and
whistles of exploding men,
careless with their eroding limbs
hoping for memorial films
and singing blasphemous...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-31-2009, 12:29 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
It's a concept album, so I suppose this song can...

It's a concept album, so I suppose this song can be confusing without the others to back it up. This song takes place in the early stages of the holocaust, if that helps. The "Sacred Star" is the...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 07-30-2009, 11:32 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,732
Posted By Naked
The Anatomy Of...

This is 10 song album I finished over summer. Criticism would be much appreciated!

Childhood
He can cry, but
he's not alive yet
caught in a net
of his mother's insides,
larger than the horse...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-05-2009, 12:47 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 2,433
Posted By Naked
how so?

how so?
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 06-04-2009, 08:31 AM
Replies: 7
Views: 2,433
Posted By Naked
Before she had a name, she had sculpted her...

Before she had a name,
she had sculpted her face
to not look quite the same
as the children who lay quiet,
their eyes sewn with lace

As a boy he was bald
his hair strung on his guitar
that...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-24-2009, 02:21 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 2,433
Posted By Naked
Untitled (For Now) His ears have sunk back into...

Untitled (For Now)
His ears have sunk back into
his skull to escape the cracks and
whistles of exploding men,
careless with their eroding limbs
hoping for memorial films
and singing blasphemous...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-21-2009, 06:37 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 2,433
Posted By Naked
I had them delete the rest so that I can start...

I had them delete the rest so that I can start anew with this album.
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-20-2009, 09:06 PM
Replies: 11
Views: 1,800
Posted By Naked
So many sad songs... You play with cliches a...

So many sad songs...

You play with cliches a lot, and sometimes you twist them to the point where it is ok, but try to find ways to say things in your own words. Also, when read in succession...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-20-2009, 08:55 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 2,433
Posted By Naked
The Hollow Child He can cry, but he's not...

The Hollow Child

He can cry, but
he's not alive yet
caught in a net
of his mother's insides,
larger than the horse he rides
his body grown to the form
of the cave where he abides,
he may...
Forum: Avant Garde/Experimental 05-15-2009, 12:01 PM
Replies: 563
Views: 72,025
Posted By Naked
I love Sung Tongs, but I think Feels is where the...

I love Sung Tongs, but I think Feels is where the band really starts to come together. Plus I love Avey and Panda's singing, which is highlighted on Feels and Strawberry Jam.
But I'm really digging...
Forum: Indie & Alternative 05-15-2009, 11:59 AM
Replies: 87
Views: 13,966
Posted By Naked
Fleet Foxes

I've known about them for awhile, but I've just now given their album (Self-titled) a full listen, and I'm in love. Best debut of the last 5 years, and up there for album of 2008. What do you think?
Forum: Indie & Alternative 05-15-2009, 11:57 AM
Replies: 144
Views: 18,608
Posted By Naked
The Crane Wife 3 is still their best song in my...

The Crane Wife 3 is still their best song in my opinion.
Although they've got some pretty solid stuff with Hazards, but I haven't given it a full listen yet.
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-14-2009, 11:43 PM
Replies: 95
Views: 9,704
Posted By Naked
... no. Maybe if the Tupac part had some...

...
no.
Maybe if the Tupac part had some substance and it didn't sound like he was mocking soulja boy...
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-14-2009, 11:40 PM
Replies: 95
Views: 9,704
Posted By Naked
Cliche, cliche. It's a start, I mean I starting...

Cliche, cliche.
It's a start, I mean I starting by basically writing cliche's every single line, but just try to stray away a little.
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-14-2009, 11:39 PM
Replies: 36
Views: 5,011
Posted By Naked
I like it as a pop song, kind of like beach boys...

I like it as a pop song, kind of like beach boys western pop or fleet foxes.

Yah, it does. What's the meaning?
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-14-2009, 11:38 PM
Replies: 9
Views: 1,414
Posted By Naked
Not impressive.

Not impressive.
Forum: Song Writing, Lyrics and Poetry 05-10-2009, 10:17 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 2,397
Posted By Naked
Read lyrics of the masters. Do drugs, open your...

Read lyrics of the masters. Do drugs, open your mind. Start looking at the world in a different way, one of abstract metaphors and connections.
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