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Old 01-16-2006, 04:27 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Trying to be mental but I'm too level headed/
Always know where my path is headed/
I'm on my way to making a personality/
I'm forgotten by those who like me/

CHORUS
I'm never as good as him/
But I take it on the chin/
I want to be better/
But it just ain't happening/

Trying to be cool but I figure it just ain't me/
Rather be at home where the drinks are free/
I sit on my sofa and take what I can take/
I need a job God give me a break/

CHORUS
I'm never as good as him/
But I take it on the chin/
I want to be better/
But it just ain't happening/

I'm willing for a change stuck in this life for years/
Stuck on this sofa drinking beer/
I need a new direction for my own protection/
I need a new-a new refelction/

CHORUS
I'm never as good as him/
But I take it on the chin/
I want to be better/
But it just ain't happening




I'm not going to further this song any more, but I might create a song a lot like it. It's about, as you most probably can tell, a guy working on the doll, who can't geta job because he's to lazy. 'I'm never as good as him' refers to his jealously of practically every male. It's just about your average, boring, middle-aged bloke.
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Old 01-17-2006, 09:36 AM   #2 (permalink)
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not sure why you posted this but I guess it's fair game for review contribution

the only way I can see it working is as a country or drinking song

it's too average and depressing in an uninteresting way

it needs smarter lines (the first two aren't bad) or a bottle of whiskey to go along with it
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Old 01-17-2006, 12:29 PM   #3 (permalink)
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Well I'll take your opinions but I've gotta say that you kind of missed the point of the song. It's supposed to be uninteresting. I know that may sound a bit stupid, but I thought I'd take it in a new direction. The song title kind of sets you up for the whole song really-average.
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