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Old 04-16-2006, 02:01 PM   #1 (permalink)
that's my war face.
 
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Default Average guy living in your heart

I will never be unique
that is not who I am
If that is the man you seek
you're gonna need a better plan
I can offer you mild love
love you've seen before
but know that I won't come chasing
when you walk out that door

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Average man living in a world
of Average girls we're all not that special
even though we try so hard to be
deep down inside we fit in perfectly



Very short at the moment I hadn't wrote this down beforehand or anything so this is hot off the press. Only took me about 5 minutes to write so don't expect brilliance.
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Old 04-16-2006, 04:18 PM   #2 (permalink)
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you write very well in a very simple way, i think that's because of your topic selections
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Old 04-18-2006, 03:11 AM   #3 (permalink)
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This is a good lyric again Hobo. The theme is very good, and the chorus works well (maybe too many syllables though?). The verse could be hit or miss, depending on how it sounds when put to the melody, as the individual phrases aren't very exciting (although the 'I will never be unique/if thats the man you seek' pairing is good). It looks like it'll work very well though, so well done!
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