Bad names for Jesus because God is a whore (song)

Winter · 02-26-2006, 11:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by mosesandtherubberducky

All I can say is sucks. Unless you are thinking ahead for the next pop movement then that song isn't going to go anywhere further than this board.

Hell! - when this guy has an album Im buying!

TrampInaTux · 02-26-2006, 12:32 PM

Okay okay so I think we've clarified that this song sucks. To be honest I like the verses, but yeah I think the chorus could do with a lot of improvement. Could you guys try and give me more advice though?

explosions-in-my-pants · 02-26-2006, 02:33 PM

in the chorus try one of the two

- focusing on one thing and one thing only.. bringing it to a hole new level

- open up the chorus make it short and sweet, but not too details and clean like the rest of the song..

just my thoughts.

dog · 03-03-2006, 05:46 AM

i dont mind it.

angel18 · 03-04-2006, 05:46 AM

It needs a chorus other than that its k

~~Rabid Sea Turtles~~ · 03-04-2006, 08:41 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Winter

Hell! - when this guy has an album Im buying!

Hell! I'm not.

DontRunMeOver · 03-04-2006, 03:34 PM

Yes, change the chorus. I for one am down with the whole god bashing thing, but "Bad names for jesus" sounds like a rubbish playground chant and "whore" just doesn't make much sense (unless its a criticism of omnipresence).

How about:

When Jesus rode a donkey he was riding his dad
Because God is an ass
God is an ass

If you like it feel free to use it!

TrampInaTux · 03-05-2006, 02:21 AM

Haha that is classic. I'm changing the whore part.

TrampInaTux · 03-05-2006, 02:23 AM

Okay then so the whore part is changed. What does everyone think now?

explosions-in-my-pants · 03-05-2006, 09:30 AM

i like it hobo.. you made the song a lot better i think

good job!

03-03-2006, 05:46 AM	#14 (permalink)
dog this bird has flown Join Date: Oct 2004 Location: paris,texas Posts: 860	i dont mind it. __________________ formerly ledzeppelinrulz. http://theraffinkids.bandcamp.com/ music^

02-26-2006, 12:32 PM	#12 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Okay okay so I think we've clarified that this song sucks. To be honest I like the verses, but yeah I think the chorus could do with a lot of improvement. Could you guys try and give me more advice though?

02-26-2006, 02:33 PM	#13 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	in the chorus try one of the two - focusing on one thing and one thing only.. bringing it to a hole new level - open up the chorus make it short and sweet, but not too details and clean like the rest of the song.. just my thoughts.

03-04-2006, 05:46 AM	#15 (permalink)
angel18 Music Addict Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 129	It needs a chorus other than that its k

03-05-2006, 02:21 AM	#18 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Haha that is classic. I'm changing the whore part.

03-05-2006, 02:23 AM	#19 (permalink)
TrampInaTux that's my war face. Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 1,418	Okay then so the whore part is changed. What does everyone think now?

03-05-2006, 09:30 AM	#20 (permalink)
explosions-in-my-pants angel of tragic days Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 924	i like it hobo.. you made the song a lot better i think good job!