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Old 09-11-2008, 09:06 PM   #51 (permalink)
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wow..really dude?? should probably kill yourself...i like coke and i dont mean fizzy?! wtf is THAT! thats not music, thats the work of a true moron.
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Old 09-12-2008, 10:05 AM   #52 (permalink)
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If you are serious about your lyrics, they need some work. Like maybe erasing the entire thing and starting over.

If youre not serious and just posting them for sh*ts and giggles then I digress to my original post.

And for someone who despises pro wrestling so much you seem to know heaps about it
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Old 09-12-2008, 12:26 PM   #53 (permalink)
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cheers man.
Peace to you too!
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Old 09-17-2008, 06:04 PM   #54 (permalink)
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That's a hot track yo. Werd.
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Old 10-14-2008, 04:18 AM   #55 (permalink)
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Wasn't bad, to me, but i really don't know much about rap, so...

i can see what the others are saying about the 'forced' rhyming, and, if you don't already have one, you might want to get a rhyming dictionary.

Hey, and best of luck with getting your stuff sold!
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Old 10-14-2008, 03:59 PM   #56 (permalink)
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i didnt think it was that bad...needs some wobut its not as bad as everyones saying imo
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Old 10-14-2008, 09:18 PM   #57 (permalink)
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wow..really dude?? should probably kill yourself...i like coke and i dont mean fizzy?! wtf is THAT! thats not music, thats the work of a true moron.
Go DIE! =D

This track is still hot though.
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Old 10-22-2008, 03:41 PM   #58 (permalink)
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To be quite honest, I think that you're trying to joke around.

If you're serious, I think that everything before "Dizzy" needs to be removed from the rap.

Start there. >.<
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Old 01-31-2009, 03:17 PM   #59 (permalink)
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Default creepy dreams

Daytime is useless but I still dream
Night time wonder with my minds clever scheme.

For when I am sleeping the picture comes clear
The other side of the world
OR really quite near

I win it all in the end
and have things my way
sway baby sweetheart, easy now sway

Dawn breaks on a boring raining gray day
travel- work -eat but hey baby hey
Two more sleeps and maybe you know
Dreams change the world
They show us .......they show

For I can win in the end
My plan just takes time grow
I drift off again
I know girl I know

Urban RT and Jackhammer
This could be a love song or about west ham.
Kind of David Grayish innit?
!0th in the league with no money and a manager who speaks little English.
Jealousy must reek from you all.
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Old 01-31-2009, 03:20 PM   #60 (permalink)
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Urban RT and Jackhammer
This could be a love song or about west ham.
Kind of David Grayish innit?
!0th in the league with no money and a manager who speaks little English.
Jealousy must reek from you all.
Yeah...how I long for mid table mediocrity.

Shite poem btw.
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