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Old 02-06-2009, 10:13 AM   #11 (permalink)
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well then I thought everyone knew that snow falls slow, therefor it has a slow rhythm. It is apparent that you cannot decipher metaphors all that well.
You ask for suggestions and then insult someone who gives you a perfectly reasonable one? Good luck with that. Sheesh.
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Old 02-06-2009, 07:26 PM   #12 (permalink)
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We dont have this song up on the net anywhere as of yet. BUT my band does have a few other songs up that I have posted lyrics to.
I could put this one up in a different place for you to hear if you want. It is in rough form with no drums in it, lol. but guitar and vocals are there.
Sounds pretty good.
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Old 02-08-2009, 06:41 PM   #13 (permalink)
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You ask for suggestions and then insult someone who gives you a perfectly reasonable one? Good luck with that. Sheesh.
how is that defensive?

Does "As we walk to they rhythm of a whale's heartbeat" sound better. No.

Snowfall is slow and unconsistant, as that a of person or person's fighting for their life, leaving blood trails behind them with every effort that they have to make their way home, or to safety.

One person's perception of what is logical does not mean they understand the words in front of them.
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Old 02-08-2009, 08:27 PM   #14 (permalink)
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Old 02-09-2009, 03:21 PM   #15 (permalink)
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i thought the song as a whole was decent, nothing really spectacular, but as said before, if sang correctly it could work.
to stray from the common opinion here, i actually thought the first two lines were the best.
as for the rhythm of the snow.. the metaphor could be interpreted differently based on the individual. to some it may be a slow steady rhythm, others it may seem to have no rhythm, which is still symbolizing a lack of order.. etc, etc.
all i'm saying is that metaphors are very useful literary devices, i'm a fan
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