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Stone Birds 05-25-2009 10:42 AM

You should write a song about this (don't have to be straight-forward)
I'm going to your journal

Nicktarist 05-25-2009 01:06 PM

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You should write a song about this (don't have to be straight-forward)
Yeah, I could couldn't I? I'll see what I can come up with. ;)

peace,
-nick

Stone Birds 05-25-2009 06:12 PM

Not to be annoying but you don't need to put your name at the end of every post (its already to the left of the post

Nicktarist 05-26-2009 08:14 AM

It's a formality I picked up on another forum. I won't litter your thread with my name though. :)

coryallen2 05-26-2009 08:48 AM

Ahhh Give him a break Stone. Nice songs BTW.

Stone Birds 05-26-2009 09:17 AM

Thanks, nick i don't really care if you do that or not i just wanted to see your reaction (about the same as they always are, very calm)

Stone Birds 05-26-2009 06:45 PM

Wherever I Go
 
I could walk in the valley
I could walk in the snow
I could go anywhere, anywhere
Just come with me
Wherever I go, wherever I go

The Bottom of the forest
The Top of the mountain
I need some help adding to this song

Stone Birds 05-26-2009 06:49 PM

Open Lullaby
 
Lie down and rest
Your little head
And I’ll sing you
An Open Lullaby

The trees are __________________(Color ex: Blue)
and their leaves are___________________(Different Color ex: Red)
The ______________________(Plural Noun ex: Puppies)
Are flying
So high in the sky
Do you like __________________(Season except Autumn ex: Winter)
Cause I love autumn
Hold __________________(Idea Noun ex: Love)
To your heart
And don’t let it go

When I dream, dream, dream,
When I run, run, run
When I fly, Fly, Fly
I feel free

_______________(Adjective ex: Winter) Winds
come forth to carry_________(your, my, or the)
_________________________(Noun, or Noun w/ Adjective ex: Gentle Serenity)
Across the universe (2nd time only)
My first mad libs song.

Stone Birds 05-26-2009 06:51 PM

Lunartown
 
Does the sun burn you
Does it make you singe
Does the sun hate you
Does it make you flinch

Does the moon heal you
Does it make you better
Does the moon love you
Does it make you smile

Welcome, welcome to lunartown
Where everybody smiles
Welcome, welcome to lunartown
Where everybody walks away from the sun
And runs towards the moon
Catching the winds in their hands
Welcome, welcome to lunartown (x2)

The streets are crossed
In a bright blue veil
In the night
Another wolf, another wolf howls
To the moon

Welcome, welcome to lunartown (x4)

Do you like it’s
Gentle light
Against your face

Come with me (x2) to lunartown

Welcome, welcome to lunartown (x2)
Where everybody smiles
Welcome, welcome to lunartown
Where the spirits walk
Welcome, welcome to lunartown (x3)

Nicktarist 05-27-2009 09:06 PM

With 'wherever I go', your essentially looking for rather hyberbolic statements right? Like:
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As far as the ocean blue
etc. etc. I'm just gonna start from the bottom and work my way up here if you don't mind. :o
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I could walk in the valley
I could walk in the snow
I could go anywhere, anywhere
Just come with me
Wherever I go, wherever I go

The Bottom of the forest
The Top of the mountain
My issues start with the second verse here. First, forests aren't know for being low. They are known for trapping unwary visitors in their vice-like darkness. So, that line could easily be changed to--

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From the dark of the forest...
Since we've changed the first line here to a call, we have to write the response--and so to keep your response consistant, we have to use something open. Like a plain (pasture, meadowland, lowlands etc. etc.)

We'll just say

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...To the open Pastures
So we've finished that line. Now lets take your mountain idea and expand that

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From the Highest Summit...
Now our response obviously has to be a vally or a canyon. I'm going to choose a canyon here (it's more interesting in my opinion)

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...To the ringing abyss
So we've finished that second line, you could probably add one more verse using that technique and use your first verse as your chorus. That would make for one nice little song :)


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