Key

Idk I didn't even read the lyrics. I'm just trolling.

Beyond Perception

I dig it.. good message. Most can relate.

One suggestion if you're open to it, "Transforming all wrongs into rights." Might want to drop the 's' in both words. Think it syncs up a bit cleaner.

"This path
Is now clear.
In this illuminated night
The stars shine oh so bright.
Transforming all wrong into right."

DemonicDax

Thanks for the input. Yeah, when I was writing that line I thought it sounded weird, but at the same time I wasn't sure if "All wrong into right" would be grammatically correct or not. I did think of changing it to that but I didn't because of the grammar, although in retrospect I suppose grammar doesn't always matter when it comes to song lyrics. So yeah, I'll probably change that line to your suggestion, it fits a lot better and doesn't sound so awkward.

Chula Vista

All of the greats toss away grammar if it'll make a lyric flow better. You're good.

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“The fact that we live at the bottom of a deep gravity well,
on the surface of a gas covered planet going around a nuclear fireball 90 million miles away
and think this to be normal is obviously some indication of how skewed our perspective tends to be.”

DemonicDax

I suppose you're right, that notion might also get me out of a few jams while writing lines. Thanks for letting me know.

Beyond Perception

Also, the word, 'rights', is often associated with:

plural noun: rights

a moral or legal entitlement to have or obtain something or to act in a certain way.
synonyms: entitlement, prerogative, privilege, advantage, due, birthright, liberty, authority, power, license, permission, dispensation, leave, sanction, freedom; historicaldroit

DemonicDax

Thanks for letting me know, those synonyms could definitely help in the future

Beyond Perception

For sure my friend. Let me know when you're performing the song live and if it's close enough to me in Florida, I'll come down and tell everyone that I helped write it..

The Batlord

Did you actually write a song, or just the lyrics?

For once we agree. Led Zeppelin sucks and Jimmy Page is a pedo.

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DemonicDax

Well, I have written the lyrics and have a general idea of the melody of the song, and I am still working on transferring it to sheet music. If you are asking have I written the instrumentals for it yet, then no, I have not. That's kinda what I'm looking for a band for, so we can hammer out and finish the actual song and whatever songs are to be written in the future.