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Blank. 09-03-2016 12:25 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by _Violet_ (Post 1740096)
As Blank would say...

The war wages on.

They're good lyrics if they're quotable. :)

Blank. 10-03-2016 05:22 PM

I look both ways
Only darkness
Hopeless
Are you lost like me?

Doctors without faces
Walking through these places
Can they see
The country boy in me

I beg you to pull the trigger
And pay the grave digger
His family needs to eat too
And I'm a waste of space like you

This one is nowhere near done. Any opinions?

Frownland 10-03-2016 11:24 PM

Don't be so concerned with trying to rhyme and you can make something sound very personal without using "I" and "me".

Blank. 10-03-2016 11:31 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Frownland (Post 1753611)
Don't be so concerned with trying to rhyme and you can make something sound very personal without using "I" and "me".

Noted. Thanks.

Delusions of Paranoia 10-04-2016 12:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 1blankmind (Post 1753474)
I beg you to pull the trigger
And pay the grave digger
His family needs to eat too
And I'm a waste of space like you

I love this part

Blank. 10-11-2016 06:00 PM

Whatever happened to Alan Smithee? Is he alive?
IMDB says he's got new movies on the rise
But I'm pretty sure that's a lie.

Alan, if you hear me, will you let me know?
I miss the classics of Hellraiser and Burn Hollywood Burn.
You need to make more
I need more Alan Smithee films

Is Alan Smithee alive?

Ol’ Qwerty Bastard 10-11-2016 06:03 PM

im judging you

Blank. 10-11-2016 06:04 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Qwertyy (Post 1756109)
im judging you

As I do the same to you.

JonasCat 10-28-2016 05:46 AM

i think this are quiet good lyrics for a beginner song. dont let you iritate by musiciens who write this song in 5 minutes. I would say you are on a good way. Only thing is: write, write, sing, sing... Then you will get better and better. Try different subjects and music. Have fun!

JonasCat 10-28-2016 05:47 AM

But yeah, the dead flirt thing is a noGooo :D hehe, i was laughing my ass off. But do your thing man. if these are your thoughts then write it! :)


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