|04-20-2006, 01:46 PM||#1 (permalink)|
Join Date: Apr 2006
Location: A place called nowhere (in other words ask)
Nightmares and Love
I'm not completely finished with it, It really needs work. Beware, it's only the chorus, but I wanna know if it's good to start out with...
Love between two
falls like stars
from the midnight blue
I cared and shared,
but got stabbed in the back.
Letting this nightmare run it's track.
My day has come I will not fear
the light in the distance will soon be near.
you will be sorry and you will pay
for all that **** you did to me that day.
I would love some constructive criticism if at all possible. Just say what you like about it (or don't) and what needs to be removed or changed! It would help alot!
If you look into a mirror,
holding a dozen roses,
you will see 13 of the most beautiful things.