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Old 07-03-2006, 11:13 AM   #1 (permalink)
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The poem!


Slow Dance

This is a poem written by a teenager with cancer.

She wants to see how many people get her poem.

It is quite the poem. Please pass it on.

This poem was written by a terminally ill young girl in a New York Hospital.

It was sent by a medical doctor Make sure to read what is in the closing statement AFTER THE POEM.

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SLOW DANCE

Have you ever watched kids

On a merry-go-round?

Or listened to the rain

Slapping on the ground?

Ever followed a butterfly's erratic flight?

Or gazed at the sun into the fading night?

You better slow down.

Don't dance so fast.

Time is short.

The music won't last.

Do you run through each day

On the fly?

When you ask How are you?

Do you hear the reply?

When the day is done

!

Do you lie in your bed

With the next hundred chores

Running through your head?

You'd better slow down

Don't dance so fast.

Time is short.

The music won't last.

Ever told your child,

We'll do it tomorrow?

And in your haste,

Not see his sorrow?

Ever lost touch,

Let a good friendship die

Cause you never had time

To call and say,"Hi"

You'd better slow down.

Don't dance so fast.

Time is short.

The music won't last.

When you run so fast to get somewhere

You miss half the fun of getting there.

When you worry and hurry through your day,

It is like an unopened gift....

Thrown away.

Life is not a race.

Do take it slower

Hear the music

Before the song is over.

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Dear All:

This young girl has 6 months left to live, and as her dying wish, she wanted to send a letter telling everyone to live their life to the fullest, since she never will.

She'll never make it to prom, graduate from high school, or get married and have a family of her own.



this is some powerful shit....amazing flow don't you think?
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Old 07-03-2006, 11:48 AM   #2 (permalink)
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I always become very cynical about e-mails which are sent around containing poems and messages sent by so-and-so who is in one terrible situation or another... but regardless of whether the opening and closing statements are true, Adidass is right, that poem has a really great flow and the ending section:

"Life is not a race.
Do take it slower
Hear the music
Before the song is over."

Is fantastic for how it plays on the previously used theme:

"You'd better slow down.
Don't dance so fast.
Time is short.
The music won't last."

Changing it from a suggestion to an instruction. Whether or not this was written by a terminally ill girl, its really good...
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When Pete plays it is 100% live , your music if that's what you call it doesn't sound so good either? so you can't really critercize can you ?
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Old 07-03-2006, 11:50 AM   #3 (permalink)
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yeah, it's irrelevant, i thought it was so well rounded and the rhyming was really good....smashing effort i would say....












































oh and you're going to hell for not buying the cancer story...:-/





















































sorry, i'm having a *black humour* day...
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Old 07-03-2006, 12:06 PM   #4 (permalink)
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oh and you're going to hell for not buying the cancer story...:-/
I've already paid for the ticket

Actually, I was quite tempted to tear the poem to shreds, but then thought better of it (partly because it is really good, so I'd have to lie... mainly because it might involve tearing a terminally ill girl's poem to shreds...)
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