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Old 09-08-2008, 04:53 AM   #11 (permalink)
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I've tightened the cork
To the bottle I'm sending
I'm ready to find a new shore.
I think I'll be fine
In the waves of the ocean
As long as I wash up on yours.
Drifting with hope
And my fingers crossed twice
I'm holding my breath all the way.
I sing with the moonlight
And dance to the foam
While the current just lifts me away.
I've whispered your name
Through the cracks of my dreams
Let it pass through my lips like a song.
If I'm a blank page
You're a true poet's pen
We were meant to be "us" all along.
So search through the driftwood,
Sand, small bits of shell,
Whatever else you may discover.
In the bottle I sent you
Filled up with my love
There is me for you to uncover.
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church is still boring even with Kanye.
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Old 09-11-2008, 03:47 PM   #12 (permalink)
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I love your lyrics and they go with your name and picture.
You make me think of kate bush wuthering heights.
But with added lewis carol.
I'd vote you the best contributor here.
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Old 09-11-2008, 04:32 PM   #13 (permalink)
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Why thank you.
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Old 09-11-2008, 09:58 PM   #14 (permalink)
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you do know this is a police song...right?
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Old 09-11-2008, 10:41 PM   #15 (permalink)
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No.
Well yes,
But no.
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Default Sandpaper

You are sandpaper.
You wear me down;
Thin my shell to its weakest state,
Leave me nearly exposed.
You only look tough.
You're still paper beneath the grit.
Easily torn.
Quickly discarded.
I've deafened myself.
As defense.
From your lines of lies and bullshit.
I've blinded myself.
As defense.
From watching you spin your falsities.
Grinding holes into any place
You settle too long.
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Old 09-28-2008, 02:23 AM   #17 (permalink)
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Default Alaska Squirrel

How fast can you run now Alaska Squirrel?
Can you last til the November vote?
You'd better move quickly, get out of Alaska,
Before Palin turns you into a tote!

Run little rodent as fast as you can.
Palin will hit you with her mini-van.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.

Hurry away now, Alaska Squirrel
And be wary of mavericks and sluts.
McCain, he won't catch you, 'cause he is too slow
But she'll get you by taking your nuts!

Run little rodent as fast as you can.
Palin will hit you with her mini-van.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.

Scamper away now Alaska Squirrel
Make your way to a higher ground.
Palin's melting Alaska with her evil death eyes
Soon all the polar bears will be drowned.

Run little rodent as fast as you can.
Palin will hit you with her mini-van.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.
Alaska.... (ALASKA!!) Alaskan Squirrel.

lol.
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Old 09-28-2008, 03:05 AM   #18 (permalink)
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should be done by a grindcore band
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Old 10-12-2008, 03:11 PM   #19 (permalink)
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drowning polar bears? funny...and yet so sad
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Old 10-14-2008, 05:03 AM   #20 (permalink)
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You've jumped tenses and may want to correct that.

i like the poem and with very minor changes it will be excellent! That last line is really good, and could be KILLER if you find another word for 'sit.'

(i've found that a thesaurus is an extremely valuable tool for writing pretty much anything ~ it's like adding watercolor to a charcoal drawing ~ makes it more interesting and gives you more power for expression.)

Thanx for sharing!
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