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Old 05-25-2010, 03:55 AM   #301 (permalink)
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Chard responded fairly early on to some comments in his thread.

I recommend you PM Chard if you have questions. That's what I did months ago. He is not a bot. I think like most people, he appreciates constructive comments.

I think sometimes writers feel it helps them to post what they are writing just to share what they are thinking and to inspire others to write regardless of feedback. Also, even if he doesn't respond to much feedback doesn't mean he doesn't appreciate it.
I'm not saying he's a bot, I'm just saying people would feel more inclined to give him the criticism he's looking for if he was warmer towards the posters who do so in this thread is all.
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Old 05-25-2010, 03:56 AM   #302 (permalink)
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Chard responded fairly early on to some comments in his thread.

I recommend you PM Chard if you have questions. That's what I did months ago. He is not a bot. I think like most people, he appreciates constructive comments.

I think sometimes writers feel it helps them to post what they are writing just to share what they are thinking and to inspire others to write regardless of feedback. Also, even if he doesn't respond to much feedback doesn't mean he doesn't appreciate it.
If he wants us to contribute to his ideas he needs to contribute here too. Two out of the 6-7 threads he has made were locked for being utter gibberish. That's not exactly easy for one to warm to. All I'm asking for is a little communication, isn't that what the music board is all about?
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Old 05-25-2010, 03:59 AM   #303 (permalink)
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I'm not saying he's a bot, I'm just saying people would feel more inclined to give him the criticism he's looking for if he was warmer towards the posters who do so in this thread is all.
I agree people are more likely to give feedback (more than once) if they know for sure that it is appreciated! That's why I asked Chard by PM about his feelings, because I wasn't sure if he wanted feedback.

And I agree, Vanilla, that people who comment in Chard's thread and then get no reply probably feel confused and then a little hurt, because they are *trying* to communicate. It feels like being rebuffed. That's again why I recommend PMing Chard.
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Old 05-25-2010, 04:24 AM   #304 (permalink)
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The threads that are locked are better off locked. They were visions that i had when i was growing up, like all my songs and poems thay are all about how i personally see the world and how it effects others. Gibberish i wish. Thankyou vegangelica for fighting in my corner, I will give feedback to everyone who now responds to my thread. Whether or not it's good or bad thanks again chard.

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Old 05-25-2010, 10:19 PM   #305 (permalink)
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Looking at this world nothing frightens me
head strong with all possibilities
seeing people using fists to get what they want
realising it's only a front.
There is always a civilised way
but i find the strong are not always brave.

They use what they have to only brutalise
they will never get it never become wise
life is full of roundabouts, you give what you receive
it's a funny old world i'm not here to deceive.

Willing and able i do what i can
turn peoples heads upside down
if only for a short while you may see the light
shining all around you ever so bright.
I'm not a regular reader of your work (seeing as I don't have much free time these days and what time I do have is spent writing my own stuff.), but I stop in from time to time and read a few lyrics. This one interests me and reminds me of my own work. I was just curious: why is it titled "can opener"?
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Old 05-26-2010, 10:03 AM   #306 (permalink)
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Unlock the mind with all its fears and anxieties pour the contents into a dish and eat. Thats why i called it can opener hope that reveals all thanks. chard
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Old 05-26-2010, 01:27 PM   #307 (permalink)
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Just when i thought it was over
i couldn't have been more wrong
when she told me she was much older
before i knew it she was gone.
What a waste i thought to myself
what was she trying to prove
was all she said all lies
it was just another bad move.

Dreams that are never spoken
desires that are never awoken
drifting into an abyss
some people just take the piss.

Jump start power is low
get up to speed go with the flow
shedd all that is heavy on your heart
get rid before you depart
It's a soul searching journey
once your on it you cant stop
truth may be hidden but it's all that weve got.

Deny all that has warmed to us
all that makes us want to believe
driven by passion and the love we deserve to receive
cold and heartless for most it's only fun
just another loser just another smoking gun.
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Old 06-03-2010, 02:01 AM   #308 (permalink)
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When i get home shattered from a hard day at my works
the only thing i want is a hot bath cus my body hurts
Have a little consideration it will go a long way
do not burden me with your issues, listen to what i say.

I come home to see you and yes find out about your day
this is my peace of mind in which i am happy to play
Want to hug you and relax by your side
forget all the pressure that inside resides.

Never do focus on whats going on in your life
the reason being is iv'e never enough time
You have got me doing more than i ever thought possible
with you reading through the lines you found your own hidden law.

The only escape i have is my bottle of whiskey
or when you find the time to become all so frisky
I am just a man who needs more
i must admit i have paid for a whore.
So here we go again your the love of my life
but my precious heart is not given enough time
Are you so busy that you can't see
that i am falling into misery.

Once we had it all, once our relationship wasn't flawed
we found time to love one another,
I just do what i am programmed to do
keep the money rolling in oh brother.
What has changed us has time done all of this
are we bothered we don't live we just exist
You don't seem like you really care
though maybe you were the first to realise but you didn't share.

Jump into the back seat of my car
i,m taking you on a journey
forget the things that have gone before
take it easy don't be shirty.
I am still your husband you are still my wife
we can work this out both intwined in life.
Though the years have been heavy with not much light
you are still my beautiful remember our wedding night.

I am tired of living this way, i can't see another
so iv'e turned to you because your law governs.
Tell me something positive that won't die
and tell me the reasons why.
You have never been just a pretty face
i'd follow you anywhere at any rate
You are my light in this world
you are my favourite girl.
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Old 06-06-2010, 11:54 AM   #309 (permalink)
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If you need protection then come under my wings
soon i will reveal to you how you could be king
Listen and learn only to protect yourself
reasons for living and keeping one's good health
all is not lost if you eccept my deliverance
open your mind and take your only chance
speak quietly not to be over heard
so not to be caught out like so many nerds.

You can't listen for your ways are best
i have put so many to the test
they all fell before the finishing line
giving up what a waste of time.
No one is likely to fool me
they try try but all fail me
none of them had ounce of decency
no heart in them to encredible to believe.

Go go your own way see how far you get
you ain't cool nomore dripping with sweat
it's not hard to skate on ice
when a lake is frozen over
it's not difficult to put your foot out of line
when dealing with your brothers.

Treat me like a leper with no love at all
expect me to overcome that when being so small
only to recover to be twisted like you
only to repeat everything you do.
I am your child a monster twin
i am british i will take it on my chin
Now tired of living my owners life
at a stand still looking at the sharp edge of a knife
all for something i never believed in
finding comfort under your wings.
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Old 06-07-2010, 05:32 AM   #310 (permalink)
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Everyone has the right to be choosing
you just have no right to be abusing
hearing you all accusing
from your filthy mouths it's amusing.

Being something youv'e heard about
vile and off putting
makes you feel ill the thought of it
kicking out your stuffing..........

You would be good guys where are you
keeping an open mind away from small minded veiws
keeping faith when all seems lost
doing your best not counting the cost
Everyone wants what they haven't got
never realising they have the lot
even the poor have the ability to live like a king
in this materialistic world we live in.

Greed in everyone's hearts
how the bloody hell did this all start
brotherly love has all but gone
soon you will hear all but none
Money money it's all we think about
gambling with our health
everything goes into the pot
never taking care of yourself.

Stimulate the mind whether win all lose
it's a day out don't be confused
it's my money and il spend it how i like
you know where you can go get on your bike.
One day i hope to hit the jackpot
though i won't stop gambling until i drop
It's in my blood in my world i created
read the small print it's accuratley stated
no one's perfect but i see no one tries
to be faithfull and true to reach the skies
All i see is death and misery
that's why you will always see the back of me.
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