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Old 03-08-2009, 10:53 AM   #51 (permalink)
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Default love bus

my heart lies here with you
theres a song in my heart when your in view
you make me feel alive
when you come home at half past five

when you are with me i feel 10 feet tall
you are great looking you are beautiful
theres no one that has ever made me whole like you do
my love for you will always be true

i never ever think of being with anyone but you
you think the same when im with you to
you are my light of day even when the skies are grey
tasteing the magic were thinking the same way

love has hit us both between the eyes
what a revelation what a surprise
its normally one or the other
never at the same time
now we both can stop our climb

the air is sweeter now and can be sweeter still
now were together it most definitly will
i can see a long road ahead of us
hitching a ride on the love bus the love bus.
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Old 03-08-2009, 11:44 AM   #52 (permalink)
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Red face Chards Love Bus; as follows,

I've taken the time to read ten or so of your poems Chard, I must say you are the pinkest "Quill" I've read in awhile. Prolific and full of life, Kudos Chard. I like how you put it out there, you must be in love. Oceanside and happy, 7gauge.
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Old 03-08-2009, 11:48 AM   #53 (permalink)
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Terrible.
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Old 03-08-2009, 12:32 PM   #54 (permalink)
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you must be very lonely,adidasss,group hug.x
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Old 03-08-2009, 12:46 PM   #55 (permalink)
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No, I just don't have a penchant for cheese. Stop writing or at least publishing this crap.
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Old 03-08-2009, 04:48 PM   #56 (permalink)
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sorry that its not your cup of tea old boy.i have to keep on writing ive got to think of my fans.if you dont likey dont ready.
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Old 03-08-2009, 05:25 PM   #57 (permalink)
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If you don't likey criticism, don't publishy...
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Old 03-09-2009, 12:05 AM   #58 (permalink)
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It could use some work IMO, but to each is own. You seem pretty happy with your work.
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Old 03-09-2009, 03:44 AM   #59 (permalink)
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Default define lapses

riveting episodes
edge of my seat
cant stop watching
on tenterhooks
each and every heart beat counted

howling of the wind
to the dogs barking
in the back alley
camera shot action
electrifying momentary
lapses of reason
running to the grand finalle
tempature rising
the cold smooth head
running down my throat

time capturing defined moments
that freezes captions forever
safe guarding us all
to a higher level of understanding
accepting by the deliverence
of imagination from the void of humanity.

concurring that the whole
is more vunerable watching
with the naked eye
self commited to define each moment
accuratley than those wearing spectacles.

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Old 03-09-2009, 09:39 AM   #60 (permalink)
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Heh. The word is "tenterhooks" not "tender hooks".
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