coryallen2's Songwriting Journal

[Paranoid.Android] · 04-29-2009, 04:46 PM

Oingo Boingo - Little Girls

I love little girls they make me feel so good
I love little girls they make me feel so bad
When they're around they make me feel
Like I'm the only guy in town
I love little girls they make me feel so good

They don't care if I'm a one way mirror
They're not frightened by my cold exterior

They don't ask me questions
They don't want to scold me
They don't look for answers
They just want to hold me
Isn't this fun
Isn't this what life's all about
Isn't this a dream come true
Isn't this a nightmare too

I love little girls they make me feel so good
I love little girls they make me feel so bad
When they're around they make me feel
Like I'm the only guy in town
I love little girls they make me feel so good

They don't care about my inclinations
They're not frightened by my revelations

Uh oh take a second take
Uh oh its a mistake
Uh oh I'm in trouble
Uh oh the little girl was just to little
Too little, too little, too little
Isn't this what life's all about
Isn't this a dream come true
Isn't this a nightmare too

And I don't care what people say
And I don't care what people think
And I don't care how we look walking down the street

First time I heard that song I was basically like this the whole time:

mr dave · 04-29-2009, 07:07 PM

i won't post the lyrics, they lose their poignancy when you don't hear the delivery.

Bulldog · 04-30-2009, 05:38 AM

Those spoilsports on youtube have taken the video of it down, but anyway...

Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds - O'Malley's Bar

They'd take up a lot of space here (they are a bit on the long side), so there's the link. Easily the most disturbing set of lyrics I've ever heard. I wonder if they were inspired by the Port Arthur massacre?

~~coryallen2~~ · 04-30-2009, 06:08 AM

A cyber WTF?

~~coryallen2~~ · 04-30-2009, 07:02 AM

I wrote this song last night when I was bored. This is the first time I have ever showed anyone my work. Please comment and tell me how I am doing.

He spends today like anyother.
He sits down to write his brother.
His brother is in iraq but someone just had to tell
About their mother.
The boy now in tears write his brother.

If I could be like that.
I would give anything.
Too live just one day.
In those shoes.
If I could be like that.
Just for one day.
(OH) What would I do?

The boys brother is now a hero.
He served and saved so many people.
But today the boy kneels to remember in front of a steeple.
Later that night the boy stares at the ceiling.
He thinks to himself with uncontroable feelings.

If I could be like that.
I would give everything.
To walk in my brothers shoes.
So I can feel how really it is to lose.
How it really is to bruise.
So I could taste all of his glory.
I could tell my own story.

If i could be like that.
I would give anything.
To be just like you.

I hope you guys like it. I'm kinda scared to post it but here goes nothing.

Sooth · 04-30-2009, 12:25 PM

I love the simplicity of the lyrics. Pretty good. Kindof sad too.

[Paranoid.Android] · 04-30-2009, 12:30 PM

looks that way...

333 · 04-30-2009, 01:10 PM

Great songs; dark lyrics. So in my book - ****IN' SWEEEET!

"The Scream of a Butterfly" by Acid Bath
A creature made of sunshine
Her eyes were like the sky
Rabbit howls like something old as we twitch to her lullaby
The scalpel shines in god's sunshine
Street lights whisper pain
Down here near the poison stream our god has gone insane

She smiles like a child with flowers in her hair
With blood on her hands into the sun she stares
She feels it die, I heard her cry (verse x2)

Like the scream of the butterfly

Sunshine a house in flames
She likes it where she gets it but it's never felt the same
Surgery in the house of dissection
When your candle burns out I will resurrect you
She runs through fields of daisies
Yeah it's just a shame that they eat their own babies
Who cares cause the air is free
When you get there will you kiss the dead for me?

There's blood on the moon and the summer is cold
There's love in the room but baby that's gettin' old
There's blood on my face sittin' on a dead shore
A highway of emptiness and I'm gettin' bored

There's blood on the moon as we plan our escape
The goddess in bloom, handcuffed and raped
There's blood in the bathtub, baby, murder the king
There's blood on the moon
There's blood on just about everything

Sunshine a house in flames
She likes it where she gets it but it's never felt the same
Surgery in the house of dissection
When your candle burns out I will resurrect you
She runs through fields of daisies
Yeah it's just a shame that they eat their own babies
Who cares? 'Cause the air is free
When you get there will you kiss the dead for me?

Something cold is forced inside her
A tear spills down her cheek
Stillborn songs of a dead dreamer
Hymns of the needle freak
With sunlight in her hair she smiles like she don't care
Her dreams are liquid blue
I cut myself again and again to remind myself of you

She smiles like a child with flowers in her hair
With blood on her hands into the sun she stares
She feels it die, I heard her cry (verse x2)

Like the scream of the butterfly (x2)

I met an angel with a sawed-off shotgun
Wanted by the FBI
We dropped some acid, killed our parents
Then we hit the road
Like the scream of the butterfly (x4)

crash_override · 04-30-2009, 01:21 PM

After reviewing this you may consider changing your chorus to something a little more... original.

3 Doors Down - Be Like That

He spends his nights in California
wathcing the stars on the big screen.
and then he lies awake and wonders
why can't that be me??
Cause in his life he's filled with all these good intentions.
He's left a lot of things he'd rather not mention right now.
Just before he says goodnight,
He looks up with a little smile at me and he says

If I could be like that (like that)
I'd would give anything
Just to live one day
In those shoes.
If I could be like that (like that), what would I do?
What would I do? yeah

Now in dreams we run.

She spends her days up in the north park,
Watching the people as they pass.
And all she wants is just a little piece of this dream, is that too much to ask?
With a safe home, and a warm bed, on a quiet little street.
All she wants is just that something to hold onto now, that's all she needs. (all she needs)
Yeah!

If I could be like that, I would give anything
Just to live one day, in those shoes.
If I could be like that, what would I do?
What would I do?

Yeahee yeah oh ohhh yeah
Falling into this, in dreams we run away.

If I could be like that, I would give anything
Just to live one day, in those shoes.
If I could be like that, what would I do?
What would I do? x3

Falling in.
I feel I'm falling in to this again.

**Janszoon** · 04-30-2009, 01:27 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bulldog

Those spoilsports on youtube have taken the video of it down, but anyway...

Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds - O'Malley's Bar

They'd take up a lot of space here (they are a bit on the long side), so there's the link. Easily the most disturbing set of lyrics I've ever heard. I wonder if they were inspired by the Port Arthur massacre?

That is a great disturbing song. Also, from the same album, I've always found the lyrics to "Song of Joy" especially disturbing.

04-29-2009, 04:46 PM	#41 (permalink)
[Paranoid.Android] YOU GET NOTHING! Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: The heart of the Sun. Posts: 76	Oingo Boingo - Little Girls I love little girls they make me feel so good I love little girls they make me feel so bad When they're around they make me feel Like I'm the only guy in town I love little girls they make me feel so good They don't care if I'm a one way mirror They're not frightened by my cold exterior They don't ask me questions They don't want to scold me They don't look for answers They just want to hold me Isn't this fun Isn't this what life's all about Isn't this a dream come true Isn't this a nightmare too I love little girls they make me feel so good I love little girls they make me feel so bad When they're around they make me feel Like I'm the only guy in town I love little girls they make me feel so good They don't care about my inclinations They're not frightened by my revelations Uh oh take a second take Uh oh its a mistake Uh oh I'm in trouble Uh oh the little girl was just to little Too little, too little, too little Isn't this what life's all about Isn't this a dream come true Isn't this a nightmare too And I don't care what people say And I don't care what people think And I don't care how we look walking down the street First time I heard that song I was basically like this the whole time: __________________ I see myself as an intelligent, sensitive human with the soul of a clown which always forces me to blow it at the most important moments. Last edited by [Paranoid.Android]; 04-29-2009 at 04:51 PM.

04-30-2009, 07:02 AM	#45 (permalink)
~~coryallen2~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: lorain,ohio Posts: 909	In those shoes I wrote this song last night when I was bored. This is the first time I have ever showed anyone my work. Please comment and tell me how I am doing. He spends today like anyother. He sits down to write his brother. His brother is in iraq but someone just had to tell About their mother. The boy now in tears write his brother. If I could be like that. I would give anything. Too live just one day. In those shoes. If I could be like that. Just for one day. (OH) What would I do? The boys brother is now a hero. He served and saved so many people. But today the boy kneels to remember in front of a steeple. Later that night the boy stares at the ceiling. He thinks to himself with uncontroable feelings. If I could be like that. I would give everything. To walk in my brothers shoes. So I can feel how really it is to lose. How it really is to bruise. So I could taste all of his glory. I could tell my own story. If i could be like that. I would give anything. To be just like you. I hope you guys like it. I'm kinda scared to post it but here goes nothing.

04-30-2009, 12:30 PM	#47 (permalink)
[Paranoid.Android] YOU GET NOTHING! Join Date: Apr 2009 Location: The heart of the Sun. Posts: 76	looks that way... __________________ I see myself as an intelligent, sensitive human with the soul of a clown which always forces me to blow it at the most important moments.

04-30-2009, 05:38 AM	#43 (permalink)
Bulldog why bother? Join Date: Sep 2008 Location: UK Posts: 4,840	Those spoilsports on youtube have taken the video of it down, but anyway... Nick Cave and the Bad Seeds - O'Malley's Bar They'd take up a lot of space here (they are a bit on the long side), so there's the link. Easily the most disturbing set of lyrics I've ever heard. I wonder if they were inspired by the Port Arthur massacre?

04-30-2009, 06:08 AM	#44 (permalink)
~~coryallen2~~ Account Disabled Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: lorain,ohio Posts: 909	A cyber WTF?

04-30-2009, 12:25 PM	#46 (permalink)
Sooth Groupie Join Date: Apr 2009 Posts: 13	I love the simplicity of the lyrics. Pretty good. Kindof sad too.

04-30-2009, 01:10 PM	#48 (permalink)
333 Music Addict Join Date: Mar 2009 Posts: 965	Great songs; dark lyrics. So in my book - ****IN' SWEEEET! "The Scream of a Butterfly" by Acid Bath A creature made of sunshine Her eyes were like the sky Rabbit howls like something old as we twitch to her lullaby The scalpel shines in god's sunshine Street lights whisper pain Down here near the poison stream our god has gone insane She smiles like a child with flowers in her hair With blood on her hands into the sun she stares She feels it die, I heard her cry (verse x2) Like the scream of the butterfly Sunshine a house in flames She likes it where she gets it but it's never felt the same Surgery in the house of dissection When your candle burns out I will resurrect you She runs through fields of daisies Yeah it's just a shame that they eat their own babies Who cares cause the air is free When you get there will you kiss the dead for me? There's blood on the moon and the summer is cold There's love in the room but baby that's gettin' old There's blood on my face sittin' on a dead shore A highway of emptiness and I'm gettin' bored There's blood on the moon as we plan our escape The goddess in bloom, handcuffed and raped There's blood in the bathtub, baby, murder the king There's blood on the moon There's blood on just about everything Sunshine a house in flames She likes it where she gets it but it's never felt the same Surgery in the house of dissection When your candle burns out I will resurrect you She runs through fields of daisies Yeah it's just a shame that they eat their own babies Who cares? 'Cause the air is free When you get there will you kiss the dead for me? Something cold is forced inside her A tear spills down her cheek Stillborn songs of a dead dreamer Hymns of the needle freak With sunlight in her hair she smiles like she don't care Her dreams are liquid blue I cut myself again and again to remind myself of you She smiles like a child with flowers in her hair With blood on her hands into the sun she stares She feels it die, I heard her cry (verse x2) Like the scream of the butterfly (x2) I met an angel with a sawed-off shotgun Wanted by the FBI We dropped some acid, killed our parents Then we hit the road Like the scream of the butterfly (x4)

04-30-2009, 01:21 PM	#49 (permalink)
crash_override Seemingly Silenced Join Date: Feb 2009 Location: Everett, WA Posts: 2,312	After reviewing this you may consider changing your chorus to something a little more... original. 3 Doors Down - Be Like That He spends his nights in California wathcing the stars on the big screen. and then he lies awake and wonders why can't that be me?? Cause in his life he's filled with all these good intentions. He's left a lot of things he'd rather not mention right now. Just before he says goodnight, He looks up with a little smile at me and he says If I could be like that (like that) I'd would give anything Just to live one day In those shoes. If I could be like that (like that), what would I do? What would I do? yeah Now in dreams we run. She spends her days up in the north park, Watching the people as they pass. And all she wants is just a little piece of this dream, is that too much to ask? With a safe home, and a warm bed, on a quiet little street. All she wants is just that something to hold onto now, that's all she needs. (all she needs) Yeah! If I could be like that, I would give anything Just to live one day, in those shoes. If I could be like that, what would I do? What would I do? Yeahee yeah oh ohhh yeah Falling into this, in dreams we run away. If I could be like that, I would give anything Just to live one day, in those shoes. If I could be like that, what would I do? What would I do? x3 Falling in. I feel I'm falling in to this again.