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Old 05-29-2011, 07:39 PM   #271 (permalink)
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Everything else aside,I like the way you put words,thoughts and feelings together.That's what captured my attention.Well done.
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Wow. Long time, no chat, Erica. Good to see you're still going strong. I don't have any criticism for any of your work in particular, but I will later when I have more time to read your new stuff.
Heya, Sljslj...I see you've been writing a lot recently and I have been meaning to comment. Thanks for saying hello!
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If a chicken was smart enough to be able to speak English and run in a geometric pattern, then I think it should be smart enough to dial 911 (999) before getting the axe, and scream to the operator, "Something must be done! Something must be done!"
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Old 05-30-2011, 07:06 PM   #272 (permalink)
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Hi there, gentle reader,

Below are lyrics for a song, "Void," that I started over a year ago, inspired by MusicBanter. At the time I had been reading quite a few lyrics in the songwriters' section in which the writers were describing being saddened to the point of despair by unrequited love or love gone wrong.

I wanted to write a song that gives people a thought-process they can use to try to feel more accepting and less traumatized when a relationship doesn't work out. Not that I haven't felt traumatized by break-ups! But over time...and after enough break-ups ...I realized that I'd survive and the ending of the relationship was probably for the best anyway:

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"Void" by Erica

He’ll do what he needs to do.
She’ll do what she needs to do.
They’ll do what they need to do,
even if it’s not being with you,
to be happy, to be happy,
and now they’re gone.

Sure, you’re missing him.
Sure, you’re missing her.
Sure, you’re missing them
and the dreams you had that never were
making him happy or making her happy
like you all along.

Now you’re trying to get yourself in order.
You feel like a vacuum and life’s a mess.
Remind yourself they had nothing to offer
and why would a vacuum want emptiness?
You don’t need emptiness.

He tried the best that he could.
She tried the best that she could.
They tried the best that they could
and it didn’t work, but at least now it’s good
that he’s happy and she’s happy
and they’re moving on.

Sure, you’re missing him.
Sure, you’re missing her.
Sure, you’re missing them
and the dreams you had that never were
making him happy or making her happy
like you all along.

Ignore the voice that says you’re worthless
and feel like a vacuum with life a mess.
Remind yourself of all that you offer
and you don’t need anyone’s emptiness.
You don’t need emptiness.

Have no regrets when it comes to love.
We all just feel what we can.
No one should expect to receive
what another doesn’t have to give.
We can’t love on demand.

Have no fear when it comes to love.
When you feel it give as much as you can.
If you’re holding back to avoid the cost,
you’ll never love, but think what you’ve lost,
for love doesn’t grow by command.

He’ll do what he needs to do.
She’ll do what she needs to do.
They’ll do what they need to do,
and now you will be doing that, too,
to be happy,
you’ll make your life happy,
and you’re moving on,
you’re moving on,
oh you’re moving on.

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This speaks to me as it seems to everyone else who reads it. It reminds of the girl I thought I'd end up marrying one day... how happy we were when we were together, how torn apart I was when we broke up, and how much better I felt when I realized I'm better off without her.

Keep it up, Erica. You really are awesome at this.
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Old 06-16-2011, 07:39 AM   #273 (permalink)
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Hello, All! This is Erica, a songwriter, singer, and beginner guitarist who is making vegan vegetarian music under the name of Vegangelica. I am writing to share some of my song lyrics to find out how other vegetarians as well as non-vegetarians perceive them and to hear any changes you recommend. I have included the lyrics from three songs in this first post, and additional songs in later posts. Thank you in advance for whatever feedback you are able to give.

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"DICHOTOMY" by Erica

He was raised to believe things were either, or.
Always one or the other, never less or more.
He could choose heaven or hell. There was no between.
He was taught to follow a being unseen.

Earth was a weigh station, a proving ground,
a gift from God in whom all joy was found.
Nothing around him existed of its own.
All was attributed to God alone.

Animals are low, they said, with humans above.
Maybe beasts had feelings, but they couldnít love.
Our duty was to use them. It was their fate
to feed and clothe our kind as we procreate.

His family loved animals but only cooked well through.
They liked them alive but just for what they do for you.
They felt it was righteous to dominate,
with utter disregard for whom they ate.

And they cried,
ďPraise the Lord for our earthly banquet,
the tender lamb on our dinner plate,
all of gracious Godís designing.Ē
No room for debate.

And they prayed,
ďGod, bless our family and our meal.
Come and sit at our tableís head.Ē
But if the meal were truly blessed,
the boy thought, it would still be alive, not dead.

What kind of god would ever design
the cruelty on which they dine?
What sort of god would ever intend
for creatures to come to this beastly end?

He had a sacrilegious tendency
not to see dichotomy
but a matter of degree.

He pushed away from the table, ran as far as he could,
out to the stable where he went in his childhood
with the ghosts of the goat and the somber sheep
who used to comfort the child when they heard him weep

because he knew precisely what their end would be
but he was not allowed to set them free.
The lamb would settle by his side. The farm dog nuzzled his hand.
They had no need for words to understand

he had a compassionate tendency
not to see dichotomy
but a matter of degree.

Heís a grown man now, buys his own table fare,
a vast cornucopia of fruits that plants bear.
No animals are used or killed to meet his needs
because he nourishes his life with the goodness of seeds.

If God gave ďevery green plantĒ for food,
then why do people think itís rude
when you say that killingís not nice,
and itís cruel to sacrifice

all these beautiful beings whose birth
makes them our fellow travelers on earth,
sharing love and pain and joy,
which he already knew when a boy

because of his wonderful tendency
not to see dichotomy
but a matter of degree.

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"I" by Erica

I used to like bacon frying in the pan.
I used to raise the meat supply with my demand.
I loved burgers on the grill.
I used to eat my fill.
Taste was all that mattered to me.

I used to like tuna from a can.
I used to like hotdogs from the stand.
Youíd think with all of these Iís in my life,
I would have had the eyes to see
what people were doing to you
to turn you into food for me.

But I didnít realize. I never thought to care.
Now I wish Iíd loved things less. Wish Iíd been aware.
And you, you, whom I didnít think about before,
I wish Iíd loved you more.

I used to like spiced ham and eggs.
I used to like chickensí wings and legs.
I didnít think about you.
You were too far from view.
All I thought about was me.

I used to like ice cream cones.
I used to like veal and breaking wish bones.
Youíd think with all of these Iís in my life,
I would have had the eyes to see
you had a life of your own
and it didnít belong to me.

But I didnít realize. I never thought to care.
Now I wish Iíd loved things less. Wish Iíd been aware.
And you, you, whom I didnít think about before,
I wish Iíd loved you more.

You were a piglet when I was five.
You were so playful, so alive.
I could feel the joy in your step.
I could sense your curiosity.
Now I wonder, were you one of them
whom I ate unthinkingly.

Oh, I realize now. I use my eyes to see.
Now I donít love things. They mean less to me.
and you, you, whom I didnít think about before,
now I love you more
I love you more
I love you more
I love you more!

I donít dismiss your pain. I donít use you for gain.
I donít raise you to eat. I donít need eggs, milk, or meat.
I donít cut your life short. I donít kill you for sport.
I donít slice you apart. I donít harden my heart.

I donít make you feel fear. I donít taunt you or jeer.
I donít crush you as chicks. I donít beat you with sticks.
I donít shoot you with bows. I donít stab you in shows.
I donít exploit the meek. I donít torture the weak!

I donít harvest your seed. I donít force you to breed.
I donít stuff you with grain. I donít bludgeon your brain.
I donít chop off your head. I donít cook you when dead.
I donít pay people to do these awful things to you!

I donít kill you as lambs. I donít smoke you as hams.
I donít boil you in stew. I donít barbecue you.
I donít lure you with calls. I donít mount you on walls.
I donít sever your limbs just to satisfy whims.

Because I love you more.
I love you more.
I love you more.

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"BRILLIANT TRAGEDY" by Erica

Civilization is going to decay.
All that we treasure will crumble away.
Our planetís future will burn out with the sun.
Itís written in the stars. Thereís nothing to be done.

Uncountable religions will be conceived and die
as people try to answer the age-old question, why?
Why is there something instead of nothing at all?
Why did the universe arise just to fall

with natural law and mortality
the fatal flaw
in this brilliant tragedy.

Some people say there is an author of this play,
someone who wrote it all and still directs today.
The only stage hands I see though are our own.
I think that we write and perform this play alone.

Our death is preordained. Thereís no use to pretend.
All of our lives come to the same sad end.
Nothing we do or make is ever going to last.
I didnít sign up for this role in which Iím cast

with natural law and mortality
our fatal flaw
in this brilliant tragedy.
But....

CHORUS
Thereís no need to give up hope:
Thereís a way that you can cope
even though the end is clear.
What you do matters now
and to all who will be here.
When you spread your love and joy,
treating others caringly,
trying to help them so their lives
are as good as they can be,
we can still find meaning
even though we see
we are stars
in a brilliant tragedy.

We are a walking fatality.
Such is life: what wonít be will be.
But there is good news: youíre not dead yet.
No need to have a pessimistic mind set.

How fortunate we are to be in this tale,
a creative production of amazing scale.
Though we will never see the end or start,
each one of us gets to play our part

with natural law and mortality
our fatal flaw
in this brilliant tragedy.
And...

CHORUS: REPEAT

All life on Earth will die. Nothing can flee
the sunlightís increasing intensity.
Oceans will boil and evaporate.
The life-giving sun will now exterminate.

Red Giant enlarging, scorching and bright,
before contracting into night.
No survivors. All weíll leave is space debris
in a universe expanding for eternity

since natural law and mortality
were our fatal flaw
in this brilliant tragedy.

wow. that was really nice. i had fun reading the lyrics and could pretty much relate to some of the lines. keep up the good work!
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Well, MB . . .

It took me almost two years to complete the song and YouTube video for "Wring," which I wrote back in 2009 after being inspired by Stone Birds' recommendation of cheese as a song topic: http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...tml#post690176

My other "muse" was AwwSugar, who told me that the only rhyming poem to work with death as a theme was "Ring around the Rosie." And so I decided to create a creepy, rhyming song about cheese (and eggs) based loosely on that tune.

"Wring" shows my reasons for choosing to be vegan.

This vegan song has special meaning to me because it gives glimpses of experiences I had when I was five years old and first realized the horror of how people mistreat animals. Also, I am fond of the recording because I recorded the cello part the day after I received my Cheap Chinese Cello in the mail. I was so excited to be playing a cello that I wanted to use it right away in a song!

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wow. that was really nice. i had fun reading the lyrics and could pretty much relate to some of the lines. keep up the good work!
Thank you for reading, Virgin. I'm glad you could relate to some of the lines.
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Well, MB . . .

It took me almost two years to complete the song and YouTube video for "Wring," which I wrote back in 2009 after being inspired by Stone Birds' recommendation of cheese as a song topic: http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...tml#post690176

My other "muse" was AwwSugar, who told me that the only rhyming poem to work with death as a theme was "Ring around the Rosie." And so I decided to create a creepy, rhyming song about cheese (and eggs) based loosely on that tune.

"Wring" shows my reasons for choosing to be vegan.

This vegan song has special meaning to me because it gives glimpses of experiences I had when I was five years old and first realized the horror of how people mistreat animals. Also, I am fond of the recording because I recorded the cello part the day after I received my Cheap Chinese Cello in the mail. I was so excited to be playing a cello that I wanted to use it right away in a song!

Vegangelica - "Wring"



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that was pretty nerve-wracking - I couldn't really continue watching the images - but the song is ace - two thumbs up from me
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what? i don't understand you. farming is for vegetables, not for meat. if ou disagree with a farming practice, you disagree on a vegetable. unless you have a different definition of farming.
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I love that song it was really great but the whole time I was watching the video I just kept thinking that I'm craving a cheese burger right about now. I haven't had one in weeks.
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I love that song it was really great but the whole time I was watching the video I just kept thinking that I'm craving a cheese burger right about now. I haven't had one in weeks.
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that was pretty nerve-wracking - I couldn't really continue watching the images - but the song is ace - two thumbs up from me
Thanks for listening to the song, Duce, and for giving your feedback.

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I love that song it was really great but the whole time I was watching the video I just kept thinking that I'm craving a cheese burger right about now. I haven't had one in weeks.
Darn it! I *knew* that picture of the cheeseburger looked too tempting. (That's one disadvantage of trying to use Public Domain photos: lack of selection.)

I probably should have used one of these images instead :







Yummy, yummy, yummy!

(Or this one, in honor of unfluffy, cat-loving Zaqarbal):

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If a chicken was smart enough to be able to speak English and run in a geometric pattern, then I think it should be smart enough to dial 911 (999) before getting the axe, and scream to the operator, "Something must be done! Something must be done!"
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and hamster enjoying his carrot


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Hello again, MB.

Earlier I posted lyrics for a song about coping when someone leaves you: http://www.musicbanter.com/song-writ...ml#post1044285.

Here are lyrics for a song that tells the story from the vantage point of the person doing the leaving:

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“Tango” by Erica

I love being your friend
too much to pretend
to feel more than I do
even though I love you.
I’m not giving you my best –
I keep my heart, you get the rest.

Oh it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

You know that I’ve tried
but it’s no use to hide
I willed myself to stay,
but my love won’t obey.
I can’t rekindle what never burned
and it’s a sad way we’ve learned

it takes two to tango
and one to let go.

Oh it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

I should have known
when I never wanted to slow dance,
I should have known
when I never felt much romance,
I should have known
as I lay in the dark
what I missed between us
is feeling a spark.

I can’t play the partner’s part any more
when we both want more.

I don’t want to leave you
and believe me I grieve, too,
but I’ve no wish to deceive you
when I see I can’t offer my all,
and you deserve all.

I thought love would suffice –
our friendship’s so nice –
yet my feelings hold back
like the passion we lack.
I’m not giving you my best.
I keep my heart, you get the rest.

It takes two to tango
and one to let go.

Oh, it’s hard for me to say,
so much is going our way,
but it’s the wrong way for me.

It’s hard for me to say -
so much is going our way -
but it’s the wrong way for me.

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