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Old 01-25-2010, 09:50 AM   #1 (permalink)
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Default What'sNext's Songs

I've been writing songs for a while now, and this one isn't the best, I know. It has some week spots and I'd love any suggestions on how it can be improved. Thanks for your time.

The songs starts pretty fast, but at the second part of each verses, it cuts in half and speeds back up at the Chorus. (I know that was really poorly explained)
Verse 1:
The joint I'm smoking smells like a bear
The rest of the guys chase their careers

But I'm Floating on a cloud
My head's too light to be too proud

Chorus:
But as I fall from heavens fields
I pass my past and drop my sheild
And nothing is real
It's not a worship, more a warning
Where will I be in the morning?

Verse 2:
In Your eyes I see the fear
What you think you see is shear

Craziness, it's just as well
'Cause crazy's fun so what the Hell

Chorus
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