CitlaliScarlett

You mean add music to it and such? Sure, unless I get credit and which one?

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CitlaliScarlett

Ahh!!! Performing soon in front of hundreds of people nervous!!!!! My voice is F***ed up and not sure which songs to preform, don't want to preform a song already owned, want to preform my own!!! Changed band name to "The Befallen" I thought "The Uprising" is better. Hmmm....What do I do????????????? ;( AAAAHHHH!!!!!!!!!

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CitlaliScarlett

Empty(Fill Me)

Moveless and lifeless
That's how you see me
Depression and sadness
It's all you give me

I must make with what you give me
But how can I if you give nothing to me?

Without anything, how can you destroy me?
Please, just fill me with something
Can't you see the emptiness in me?
Can't you feel it?

All I wish today
Is for a meaning in it all
I've been wishing since days before yesterday
I can't go on after all

I make with what is given
But you have nothing to be given

Without anything, how can you control me?
Please, fill me with something
See the emptiness in me?
Don't you feel it deep within me?

My heart's like a cup
Empty without the blood
My mind is like waterfall
Everything slips right through me

This emptiness, how can you control me?
I'm filled with nothing
This emptiness, it's the only thing in me
I'm so numb I can't feel it deep within me(X2)

I was left to bleed
I was left to cry
I was left to bleed
I was left to die

Stone Birds

this is the one (sorry when i originally posted this was in it's own thread)
and also if you want credit i'll definitely make sure to give it

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CitlaliScarlett

sure why not? that's cool, thanks. You see, I can write, but can't make rhythem, I leave that up to my friends, so yeah, go for it. Have fun. Yes, I will need the credit!!

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VEGANGELICA

Hi Citlali,

I read the posts in your thread and listened to your band's myspace songs to get an overfall impression of your music.

I actually think "Burning Ashes" was a pretty fitting band name, because most of your lyrics, like those above, describe someone who is in what I'd call a "codependent" relationship with someone else.

Your songs often seem to describe a person who has been burned by life into ashes...no longer feels very alive...and yet smolders still, angry that she has not been given what she feels she needs. She feels empty and bad about herself, turns to others to feel full and whole, and then feels anger when they can't give her what she wants...happiness and self-worth and direction...because those feelings are, in my opinion, only achieved through one's own self and not others. Alternatively, in your lyrics the protagonist feels saved by someone else. That is a big burden to place on another person! It is true, though, that sometimes we do feel "saved" and made more alive by people we meet. That is a lovely feeling, but a sad one when that person becomes a lifeline.

I feel your lyrics are well written although sometimes repetitive and melodramataic (compared to most of my experiences of life). You say what you want to say and describe a certain mental state well. I'd prefer the topic of your lyrics to vary more often, but perhaps you focus on this theme of dependent love because that is the theme of your band?

As for a potential title for this song, quoted above, the first name that popped into my mind was "Consumed," since the song describes someone consumed by her anguish and unable to see past it. I suppose it is a little predictable, though, to name a song after a word used in the first line!

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Diver-City

kind of conflict with its self. I know its not much help, its just an opinion. The right format is there, i think it could use a little post production work.

CitlaliScarlett

Thank you for your opinion and I'll ask my band if we can return the name to it's oringinal. I will try to write music on different themes. At times, I felt to not always write on a failed love, but I guess somehow along the way, I am pulled towards that direction. Thank you again!!!! and Yes, "Consumed" seems like a good title!

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VEGANGELICA

What do the rest of your bandmates feel about your band name? My opinion would be less important than theirs!

I was able to find your Burning Ashes band on MySpace fairly easily using Google, so this suggests the name hasn't been used too often. You might want to check the other options by Googling them to see if they have been used before, if you haven't checked already.

My feeling, Citlali, is that if you are pulled in a certain direction, go that way, sing what you feel, and eventually you will probably move on to other topics when you are ready. I suppose it depends on what you want to do with your band. Are you just having fun expressing yourself, even if right now that means a lot of songs about failed love? Or do you want to create a certain type of music?

Other people in the thread seemed to like your lyrics as they are. Plus, there are a lot of bands that consistently create morbid or angry or traumatized lyrics, and some people gravitate toward the music because they like those themes. Whatever you sing, someone somewhere will probably like it! But, more importantly, I feel the question is do YOU like what you wrote. If you feel satisfied with it, then I'd say go with those lyrics.

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CitlaliScarlett

MySpace???? There must be a confusion, I don't post songs on MySpace. I'm working on updating, but I don't post on MySpace, then I guess for "Burning Ashes" there is only to say, Great minds think alike. Yes, it's true, I try to write from a personal life, but at the same time of what I see most of the time. In a way, kind of get tired of writing songs about failing at times, but it's like I try to begin one way and life gives me a turn. So in a way, it's hard for me to write sometimes nice things which I really want to at times. The only song here is "You" that is happy and a good feeling. I guess have low self esteem because I am constantly asking for opinions and even if they say it's fine, I still beat myself up for it. I don't know why. Thank you again!!!

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